I have sat and watched the skies,
the wonders that lurk up high.
Watching as the clouds, roll in
blankets of grayish blue, sweeps over,
with soft white fluffy pillows within.
Streaks of mist flow down from the clouds,
to form soft smoke on the tip of the sky.
Rays shine through the smokey mist,
and shadows form covers like shrouds.
As it pours down sorrows of my heart,
rains my tears into the open,
into open seas of my despair.
Loneliness I can no longer bare,
wanting the sorrows to depart,
as the storm shows it's wrath,
and I try to hold on to a lost love,
trying to follow the light to love's path.
But, my love's been drowned and broken,
from the darkness that lurks above.
With the longing of a safe embrace,
someone to ease the pain,
to shelter me from the depressing rain.
To see my beauty, and my grace,
to save me, for I'm drowning in my pain
in oceans of endless tears.
Unheard screams of my darkest fears.
Silent cries from vacant eyes,
loneliness rains down from the skies.
Now my love's drowned and broken.
Shall anyone ever love me, protect me,
shelter and embrace me, just see me?
Will I see love's face again?
Author notes
option 1 - Rain
Option #4 Depression
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thanks for this entry...
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thanks for entering and good luck.
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nice write, I liked it and the poem was deep, powerful, and very emotional ... the title is a great draw in to read the poem ... hope all turns out well and good luck in the contest ... and all the other contests this is entered in (there is a lot, lol) you are bound to do well in one of them ...
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this was a great write..i can really relate to alot of whatyou are saying and feling in this write..you words were strong, emotional and powerful as well....i think the ending fit the poem perfectly..keep writting your very talented and good luck in the contest
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Nice...
I love the imagery in this. It is an amzing write and I loved reading it. I wish you the best of luck in what is yet to come.
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Great imagery!
Your poem has great imagery. I can see everything you discribed and feel it too. I like the last stanza best:
"Unheard screams, of my darkest fears.
Silent cries, from vacant eyes,
loneliness rains down from the skies.
Now my love's drowned and broken.
Shall anyone ever love me, protect me,
shelter and embrace me, just see me?
Will I see love's face again?"
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Very powerful words. Love hurts and I felt the pain of the words as I read it.Good luck in the contest.
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thank you for your kind comment, i really appreciate it, xx
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first good luck with the contest. secondly, nice catchy title, and a poweful poem. it painted a clear picture to me, and i just loved it!
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thank you so much xxx
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know well
the feeling. God Bless.
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