A little WD40 on his hands
and she opened for him,
her secrets no longer rusted.
Barred both ways,
rain in, rain out,
river dammed doorway
waiting to allow escape.
Author notes
dat dang door used to swing both ways..not me...dat dang door
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A contest entry
- Doorknobs by Heart Sutra.
424 points, ended February 20, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Every time I read this one, I like it more.
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Thank you, Zayra...it is good if it coaxes yu to dig deep for more meaning. I think the funnist thing that ever hapened to me on ap happened with this poem. I orignally typed DW40 because I really don't knwo the name of it..jsut know it is supposed to be miracle stuff for loosenign up things. LOL...bless the poets heart that quickly saw it, male of course, and helped me know WD40. I laughed all day about it. When did I become such a girlie girl? LOL.
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Amazing!
What a huge little poem.
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thank you, pen friend. Guess you caught my cluelessness?
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"dat dang door" needs some Q20, lol. I so enjoyed this - very good!!
~ Nicolette
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funny how we can write in akk seriousness and a poem curves itself into a smile.
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I enjoyed this with excellent metaphores, the ideas are superb and it is very well written, a very powerful write. Thank you for sharing.
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thank you doomsday. If you read the other comments I made, you will surely get a chuckle. -
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He he he I know WD 40 because I used on my children bicycles (and on some keys hole suffering from frigidity) love your metaphores My first read was absolutly serious but then i started to set up in "others" direction. This the magic of poetry I suppose...
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BRAVO.....
I LOOOOOVE what you came up with for this picture...
very VERY good....
It's kind of what I came up with...only I personalized it quite a bit...and wasn't quite so witty with the wd40...
Good luck in the contest...
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Yu know, I meant to be writing in total seriusness...my aloofness shattered into a thousand giggles here.
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