You, my fire starter
Incinerating my innocence
Love like twisted metal
Entrapping my heart
chilling seductive voice
veiling me in darkness
You, my corruption
lost in beautiful nothingness
Tainting my purity
taking ownership of my heart
losing will to fight
intoxicated by deafening sadness
You, my forbidden fruit
your toxic love burns
coursing through my veins
Addicted to your numbing stare
taunted by the hunger
begging for more
you, my destruction
the captivator of my soul
Darkness consuming
lose of all else
running with eyes closed
embracing what is
You
My death
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A contest entry
- Dark Love by loveaswellashate.
393 points, ended February 20, 2007, 13 entries
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okay may I say wow. this is stunning.
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Thank u for such a nice comment. I am glad you liked it.
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Hmmm...I love it! This is really vivid and darkly-descriptive, in that it sent shivers up my spine! I love these kinds of poems, that are dark and sensual and just take the reader's breath away!
The one mistake I noticed, though, was that 'embarrassed' in line 24 should be 'embraced'. Other than that, though, I can't think of anything negative to say... Beautiful write, and thank you for entering!
Laura xxx
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Thank you for the help there. I fixed the mistake. I was writting from experiances of my past. Thanks again for the help. Another case of spell check gone bad.lol
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very deep i like the secretivness
i see more than the word written here
this is great!!
thank you for entering!!
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That was my inspiration exactly. I am glad that you liked it.
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I ABSOLUTLY LOVE THIS!!! this is poem just hit me like damn.. its like u just wrote what im feeling.. and i hope i am gettin the meanin correctly.. tell me if im wrong.. whats goin on with me is that i love this guy but i cant be with him.. for more reasons then one.. but i just want him so bad.. and i feel like hes gonna be the death of me.. that he is everythin.. my sin basically.. and im hope im readin this poem write.. but im simply love it.. ill be seein u soon...
Laters
Loves..*hugs*
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