Beauty rained from pale blue eyes,
As her innocence was stolen.
Darkness comes, none to soon,
To the puffy and the swollen.
Beaten with a long horse whip,
Her little body could not bear.
Father why must you hurt me,
Father, why don't you care.
Young and defenseless,
Was to be her only stand.
Tiny fist don't hurt much,
To a bully of a man.
A contest entry
- Take me away by --Beautiful--.
685 points, ended March 19, 2007, 22 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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300 points, ended March 10, 2007, 140 entries
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wow
I have to say, this doesn't exactly fall into the category of true love, but honestly, this made me tear up! This poem has potential and I want to wish you the best of luck in this contest! -
great poem, very sad though
very strong
good work!
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This is touching...I love the title first off...and then the first few lines are amazing...my favorite part is "Beauty rained from pale blue eyes,As her innocence was stolen." And i can so relate to that...Anyways thank you for entering and good luck
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Wow this poem brought back such sad memories for me. I can so relate. Excellent write and flow. good luck in the contest
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I think we share some of the same bad memories. Thanks for your kind comments and the applauses.
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i felt the pain... such a sad story.
i loved the picture you used to, it suited the poem very well.
keep writting, take care
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Thank you for your kind comments and applause. They are deeply appreciated.
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so tragic but i liked the way this poem flowed...also i thought the picture went well, keep writing...
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Thank you for your sweet comments.
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