Take it from me,
I'll take it back from you.
If you haven't it,
what have I left to do?
Find what is wrong?
Understand the conflict?
No way in hell.
Revenge I must inflict.
Slap my face once,
I'll slap you thrice in turn.
Knock my house down,
your city I will burn.
Civilized men,
have and will always shun
The brutal art,
Disproportionate retaliation.
Eye for an eye,
Half blind, will leave the world.
Thumb for a leg,
Births destruction untold.
How many lives
must eventually fall
To validate
Destruction of us all?
Author notes
Sorry the font is hard to read, tried to match it to the image.
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This is a great write. You raise a really good point that a lot of people don't care to even think about. My hat is off to you. Great job.
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Everyone is out to get revenge for something someone did against them. Forgiveness does not seem possible for some actions, yet there are those that do forgive and let bygones be bygones. They live their lives much freer, happier and easier than those who are always wanting to get even and pay someone back for their evil deed. Liked the flow and the message shared in these lines. Interesting background as well.
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KAPOW!
don't apololgies man the image fits perfectly to this mathmatics gone mad theme, a wonderous job too in conveying the thought of atom fire, for this indeed is our responsibility with media control and democracy, the greater level of mass conscious control, reigns of love to hold lightly, too heavy and we'll all suffer this building intensity of friction out of control, Einstein proved mass equalled energy right? well as long as the recycling and enlighteniment hold balance I believe this will not be our end, for our masters guide us through and the students will arise to the task of an awareness beyond to eventuate a stable sanctuary in humanity I know for I have felt the signs all around us...... anyways thanks for a very good write on a future
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woohooo
wow what a piece you penned, well detailed, full of emotion. Rythmn and flow perfection. Thanks so much for haring such a piece. best wishes. -
Aweness
wowness, wonderness, part of the problem is believing that there is something wrong with everyone. The other part is realizing you can only change yourself. Understand that true happyness with oneself will project onto the world and thus result in others being happy as well. then the world would not be such a "bad place" to live.
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HMMM
How many lives
must eventually fall
To validate
Destruction of us all?
So very true here. Honesty is a beautiful way to write and you ask a very good question. Great word choices and flow too. You did a great job with this piece and I am truly glad you shared this with us. Keep the pen flowing!
Always
Emily -
Maybe all lives must fall according to the tyrants of the world. They do not care if bombs red glare burn all their people to the ground. They only care about their own true narcissistic selves. Destruction is always in the hearts of those that rule without the opinions of their own people. This my friend is and will always be, as long as humans rome the land!
Bravo! BHolzner
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Powerful write but it is hard to read. Mans destruction will be at his own hand, but not for the want of some sane people trying to save it and throw there arms around it. Keep the voice strong my friend, people do hear.
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The poem itself was awesome but the orange on the background made it tough to read. But it was worth an eyestrain. Very well written!
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I like this poem, but the background and orange font make it a bit of challenge to read!!! I love the last stanza! Nice one x
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The title says it all n how simple the answer in one single word PEACE. Your words flow smoothly from the page with imagery fueled by descriptive emotions. To the question of how many lives will it take for mankind to see this is not the way for man to live. If only man would give up his greed and replace it with more compassion this world could be one very beautiful place to live. Thank you for the pleasure of this well crafted poem and the profound thoughts the readers are left to ponder within the hallway of their minds.
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Nicely done. Simple, and to the point, but very artfully written as well.
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I really liked this poem. You did a nice job on your rhyming and the message of the poem is obviously very good. There are a lot of cliche poems now and it's hard to find one like this that means something for humanity. My favorite line: "Eye for an eye, Half blind, will leave the world." Nice write
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No way in hell.
Revenge I must inflict.
nice anger!!
How many lives
must eventually fall
To validate
Destruction of us all?
im thinking about 7 billion or so...
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This is an excellent piece!
It's so sad that the world is as it is today.
I think you did a great job with this one.
Thanks for sharing it and keep up the
great work here! I look forward to reading
more from you soon!
Jeremy0826
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