She plucked the flower from the rainbow
And tucked it behind my ear.
As my golden eyes smiled sweetly at her,
She shed a happy tear.
"This daisy reminds me of you," she said,
"With your joyful face
And your colorful spirit,
You brighten all of my days."
I took her hand, and skipped along,
But soon I realized she was no longer there.
Turning around, I looked the other way,
But I couldn't find her anywhere.
I collapsed on the ground with tears in my eyes,
And as the daisy fell from my hair,
I stopped crying and picked it up again,
Looking up with the wind blowing in the air.
The sun was beginning to set,
A rainbow made of sunlight,
And was the color of the daisy
That I held in my fist this night.
The flower seemed to wink at me
With its petals painted bright,
And grinning, I picked myself up again,
Running off in the fading light.
Author notes
This is for you, Kara!!! I love you and I hope you love this because it just came sort of pouring out!
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired! by OnlyInMyDreams.
375 points, ended March 9, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this sweet write and the touch of vagueness over who, or what, the other being really is and that is a nice touch, although it drives curious kitties like me nuts hehe. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * 
YOU HAVE JUST BEEN HOODWINKED
; Courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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Well then... adorable. Gives an image of a friend there/not there... which could be interesting, I suppose.
It feels, in a way, that your story may be missing important pieces... but I feel that a lot, so it could just be me.
In any case... I feel you may have a particular flair for this genre... so keep writing!
Good luck in your future works!
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Well it is supposed to be sort of... I can't think of the right word. It's supposed to be so the reader can fill in the gaps with whatever they imagine. Do you know what I mean? I hope I'm explaining it right, I'm not very good at that sort of thing. Well, thank you for the comment!
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This is a lovely poem you wrote for a friend! I love writing poetry for my friends, even if only one I've written so far ("Faith in you").
My facourite stanza was the last:
"The flower seemed to wink at me
With its petals painted bright,
And grinning, I picked myself up again,
Running off in the fading light."
I think you compared the pure, brightly coloured daisy, with the soul of your friend. And this is something really lovely to do!
I hope your friendship will last forever, as the daisy's memory will shine in your heart!
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Thank you so much for the kind comment! She is like a daisy and that's what I was trying to get across here, I suppose. Thanks again!
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I do love this! its amazingand i really dont knnow what else to say, but that, I LOVE IT!
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Thanks, Kara! It's always good for the one who's running the contest to love your poem!
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