From the living room window
the cat watches
delivery trucks pass,
taxi cabs pass,
in trickles
of conversation
the rain
and morning pass.
In a list
A contest entry
- shower- by Cat.
375 points, ended February 19, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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the way you write always entrenches one with a thought to ponder on, without wasting words explaining
this has a very tight image, and yet so much resonates, connecting the dots. i love the situation of a kitty at a window and a living area, because they represent delicate family homey things, since later you move into the elapsing of closeness. they too have a lot of time to set and observe the day's activities. beautifully sad how you tie the two images of cars, taken in as one object, for granted, but with the departure of friendship it's slow motion. you feel every extra drip in less words each time. this loosing won't be forgotten.
you totally soaked me, congratulations -
Daisy -
i love how this poem stretches time...
reading this is like experiencing a whole rainy morning...
pass.
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Descriptive imagery paints vivid pictures in the mind as you set the scene before us...Delightful reading!
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Superb
I rather like this write, as I always enjoy walking in the rain, however, on some days I almost wish I could 'slide sideways between the drops, to stay dry'.
Very well written, as usual. Thanks for sharing.
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"in trickles
of conversation
the rain
and morning pass."
yes, this is the one.....I love this poem..
I love rain & you capture such a perfect
'rainy day' mood in this poem..the 'trickles' of conversation is just so excellent
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in trickles
of conversation...
Marvelous wording here...
talking about nothing yet everything...ahhhhh.
Becky
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Very beautiful poem..short yet so deep in thoughts..great job!
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I love the simplicity and brevity of this. A perfectly captured moment. Just wonderful. Cheers! R
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This is another breathtaking penning You bring the reader right into the moment and make an ordinary moment into something extraordinary.
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Wow. This is absolutely brilliant. Excellent write in brevity. Beautiful~
~Candy
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lovely piece
wonderfully worded... a moment captured in time and the poetic elements of an otherwise ordinary time conveyed...
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Rain conversing with the morning...what a good way to put it. We have had more rainy conversations than i can count this winter. Was so happy to see some blue sky the last couple of days. I felt almost as if I were the cat reading this! Wonderful simplicity and realness to this and the rhythms of rain.
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Well deserved Gold. Superb writing. You make it look so easy, yet few people can do what you do. This is just lovely.
SG
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It amazes me how simple a poem can be yet elegant. That is what this is. It makes me think of my youth, and our black cat; "Panther" who has been passed on since 1983. I still remember him sitting in the window, watching scenes like he was watching TV. Thanks for reminding me of our cat who was one of the funniest members of our family.
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so refreshing to read
i lve this poem
i wish other people
would read this piece
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so nicely crafted .. a whole morning in a moment in the life of Al's cat ... enjoyed this with every read, and still ... >>> Gina
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Congrats on the well deserved Gold! I love the way you have the cat in this piece.They miss nothing and yet reveal nothing.Beautiful work.
~helen
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What a great poem, and it felt as though I was able to be with the cat at that precise moment.
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This is wonderful - it brings to mind the intrinsic value of action over speech - the movement of the world outside as conversation, the only communication that can relied upon to represent nothing but itself.
That being said, the value of your words, having reminded me of all this, is great.
Excellent write & a well deserved win.
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One thing I like most about not being on here for a few days is being able to come back and read something as strong as this...
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Yep
This falls into a "type" I have come to think of as American Haiku. A distallation of a moment, a vignette, without pretention and the better for it.
It paints a still life without calling attention to itself. Me likee.
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Great insight into a morning - simple pleasures watched, seen by someone. Great flow - super poem. Top notch.
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You abosolutely captured a moment. I agree with Poetryality, this is poetry. Congrats!
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wow this is really beautiful! imagery is so well used in this, makes me feel like i'm in the rain! congrats on the trophy!
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rainy day wishes & bookmarks
volumes of unspoken thoughts. Al, you are the master of setting, laying the blueprints for the reader. this is the core of an imagery i still do not grasp within myself, but at least i can say i have witnessed. Down to earth, a simplicity that lies within a rainyday, a book to be written.
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hit and run
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"trickles of conversation" he says...
Brilliant stuff
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Bravo
Exquisite, masterful brevity, I absolutely love this.. I bow with respect -
I often wonder what my cat thinks, when she's perched on the sill...then I feel guilty because she's an indoor cat and would probably love to be outside chasing the birds from the feeder ...This has a cozy mood to it; like one of those days when you just want to curl up and watch the world go by. Enjoyed!
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There is such a subtle tone to these words. You have caused the day to lapse with few words, while the "cat" watched out the window.
This is poetry.
Like your author page, this is simple but quite lovely. Makes the reader sigh!
Congratulations on winning the Gold!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Fabulous ~ Congrats
I don't know why, but I love this....love this...love this poem! You've got a clear and beautiful image here. This was able to share an emotion and mood too. I love cats and the cat in window sounded so sweet and peaceful too
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It's raining here in Seattle today (surprise). I feel like I'm living your poem. Nicely done.
~Elora~
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Ah, make me want to get into the city again. This morning our kitty was meowing viciously at children walking past. It was actually quite amusing, but I was glad that he's an inside cat, lol.
I like this image though. Very nice.
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this is warming and wonderful.... a lazy winter's day passes with ease and a smile...
i love the conversational tickles.. oop sorry trickles..
nice
G.x
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This is terrific...love the image of a cat sitting on a busy NY window sil conversing with the rain.
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Once again you've shown us the power of simplicity, Al. Simply beautiful!
~ Nicolette
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i have to come back and again say this is one damn fine write
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Oooh, I loved this.
I can definitely see why it won gold. Excellent!
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Nice flow and wonderful imagery. I liked the part of trickles of conversation the best. It seemed like a good metaphor like people talking during a rain shower. This was an amazing write. Keep up the great work.
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i like this because it says cat- and other reasons too-
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lol...
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hell m8 ... that is one damn fine piece of work ...
this honestly reminded me of a scene in Albert Camus's "The Stranger" and how Mersault would take the place of the cat ... and just embrace what it sees ...
nice work
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A beautifully sublime moment captured. If nothing else, it certainly captured my attention
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perfect
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