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ShadowMan

The truth has fallen, softer than the light
of stars across a distant, midnight sky;
illuminating beams of misty white,
uncovering an apathetic lie.

Your face was but a distant silhouette,
your waltz was but a haunting masquerade.
The passion was a vapor, gone, and yet
I long to hear once more our serenade.

What gain was yours, what goodness did you own
by dancing round my soul? What was your plan?
I fell from heights of love and now alone
the starlight falls across my ShadowMan.

The truth has fallen like a veil of light
illuminating all the lies of night.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • macandrew
    June 5, 2007

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    Beautifully written. A wonderful flow and amazing content.

    John

  • Eusebius
    April 20, 2007
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    bravo

    Ah, an excellent and so very wonderful sonnet! perfert meter throughout...marvelous! I loved it, absolutely loved it! bravo...bravo...bravo...


  • EyeRaven
    March 20, 2007

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    Greeaaaat English Sonnet

    I've always thought about you as a master of this form, and yet here's a token of my appreciataion and respect for your outstanding (Sonnet-wise) abilities.

    The shadowman from down the mountin peers
    at those who yell his name he never hears
    but deaf the cloud that carries all their pain
    to loathe with anguished cries at his domain !!

    I thank you for such a faboulous display, not just your story rings of a mood that resembles mine (dark, mystery) but your usage of words is anything but supreme.


    Please check on my newest poems (they're all in Iambic), and I'd love to see your opinion.

    I haven't heard of you since my (To sleep) Sonnet.

    Be very well, stunning poet.
    RD.

  • Eusebius
    March 19, 2007

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    Bravo!!!

    Oh, this IS sooo very excellent, indeed! A wonderful poem with flawless rhyme and meter! I loved it, absolutely loved it! Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!!!


  • Ogreatbaldone gold member
    March 15, 2007
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    rich with subtle directness mary, enjoyed this...peace Terry

  • TheDarknessVisible
    March 1, 2007

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    Your sonnets are always lyrical and graceful. I feel a little vexed that the opening quatraine and the final couplet are slightly redundant.

    I'll just throw out a diferent couplet:

    The words fall silent like a veil of pain
    illuminating truths you wont explain.

    is that better? I just wanted to get my point across. its yours if you want to steal it. cheers!


  • MargaretG
    February 20, 2007

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    Gorgeous sonnet, Mary, and what a great conceit of the ShadowMan, visible yet insubstantial. Fantastic.


  • Old Doc Wit
    February 20, 2007

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    I dunno,maybe it's just me but, this gorgous piece to me,is both melencholy and hopeful.Could that even be possible?


  • Tirrell
    February 19, 2007
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    cool write. I like the rhythem and the flow of this as well I feel your imagry was fantastic. All in all it is a very beautiful write.


  • hugh wyles silver member
    February 19, 2007

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    Dear Mary,

    Two sonnets from your pen in one day? My cup runneth over to think that you may now be back in full stride.
    Beautiful as this is, could you not give us some clue, in an Author's note, as to the source of its inspiration?
    For inspired it is, though personal it seems.
    It would be difficult to pick a favourite extract from this fine sonnet but I would probably select:

    "What gain was yours, what goodness did you own
    by dancing round my soul? What was your plan?"

    which is surely the question asked by most who are abandoned by their lover.
    Applause for a well-written (as always) piece.
    Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.

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