I look out upon the [dirty] land and find
That if I were a [liar] I’d be able to paint
A beautiful picture that would hide the
[Whore]filled land that has [cheated] those
That are good of its life in peace and harmony
Instead, we sit here in a [smoke ring] that
Covers the [stars] in a [nameless] hate filled
Garbage they call [Technicolor] television,
That plays upon the lines [hypocrisy] for those
Too faint hearted to handle the harsh truth
[Love] left thirty years ago in the [lips] of a
Bumbling idiot that thought she could change
The crazy world, in its tragic wasteland of
Total barbarian incomprehensible ways to
Fill those dreams with gloom and despair.
Author notes
*OPTION 3*
WORD BANK.
*******make sure you [put the words in brackets]*******
A=
dirty
liar
whore
cheated
smoke ring
starrs
nameless
technicolor
hypocrisy
love
lips
A contest entry
- pretty[dirty] enough words. by noir eyes.
525 points, ended March 5, 2007, 32 entries
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Nice
I like this one, excellent creation.
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!!!!!!
whoa whoa and whoa! okay so this isn't one of those deep philosophical poems and (thank God) it's not one of those morbid poems either (eventually people who write those will tire of their shitty fucked up lives)-but it's kind of an enigma but not at the same time. i love how this tells a story...and creates this really dark (but not so dark) world in my head. ( if i'm not making sense it's because i'm 'high' lol)
i applaud you. for imagery, flow, and..well beauty. there's a bit of humor in this too so it makes it even much better. love the end stanzas...amazing!
~Tia
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Wow.
This is awesome! Good luck in the contest!!!!
<3BeautifulDisaster9
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this is good, i like it, you dida great job on it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest, you know we should do this again sometimes
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nice poem...im glad to be reading ur writings again
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