Why must you hide in a place
where there is nothing?
Your heart cries out and your soul is lost
Why must you lie and say something your not?u
Why you live a life that has no meaning?
You wonder why noone can hear you
Your voice is unspoken for
You mean nothing to the world
Why are you doing as the world wants of you?
Noone understands the pain that you hold
The tears fall down your face but noone can see them fall
Your lost to the world, your friends, and yourself
Why must you ast as if you are happy?
When you know you are slowly dying on the inside
Why must you laugh when noone can see your smile?
Can you last another day?
Another moment?
Why must your body keep going when there is nothing left?
I guess the meaning of yourself is the meaning of your world...
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Perhaps the meaning of himself should be the meaning of your world? Women are horribly selfish for thinking men are horribly selfish.
In other wods your poem has very little matter, and is based on
nothing real. A real relationship is played out between a man and a woman, and their family, and it's more about sacrifice than I need you
to KNOW me. You should know yourself before expecting other people
to be experts at knowing you, and vice versa. -
This one is tough
I don't really know anyone who fits this description. I think it might help if I did. This seems to be a quite personal poem. Did you give it to the person it is about? What was the reaction?
There are a couple of typos and a couple of lines I felt could be better structured.
My last thought is that it is healthy for a person to be the most important thing in their own world. Anyway, those are my thoughts about this one.
Andy
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This is very heartfelt and emotional. Believe it or not...a lot of us wonder these things, but lack the nerve to say it. Life is a journey of questions and sadly most of them remain unanswered. Why is that. Who knows? But knowing how you feel and being able to admit it to others an to yourself means that you have a great and intense desire to rise above these questions. For why ask questions if you are not on some level expecting to receive answers? You can last another day...another moment... your body keeps going because you are a curious and inteligent human being who is on a journey that begins anew with every breath you take. And take it from someone who has looked death straight in the eyes...life is a gift to souls like us, no matter how bad it sucks sometimes.
Blessed Be!
Azlyn
Keep writing and searching!
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