His hand, an open Lotus of delight,
is soft against the troubles of the day--
illuminating corners of the night
and chasing all uncertainty away.
He lifts me o'er the haze of distant doubt
and guards me through its tangled web that binds.
In thirst I drink His verse, it ends the drought
of agonies that claimed my tossing mind.
Beloved, but a gaze--my will disolves.
All life has faded save Your gentle kiss
upon my soul--her every need revolves
around Your love, immersed in sacred bliss.
His breath: a wind that moves my pen to write.
His hand: an open Lotus of delight.
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Refrains..refrainsss
Always speak of a talented heart, and eventually a talented pen..(I don't if tht makes me one too) but I do o love refrains, it tells so much of a musical soul, and a tender touch, and yet a finely crafted artistic ink.
Yours are always a delight to read..
and they (strangely) doesn't sound too distant from the greatest of poets that I read for..
I prepare myself for a thrill just like that of Frost's or Poe's when I stumble upon one of your writings..
Write on, and amuse us all with your impassionate writ and wit.
Be well,
RD.
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Dear Mary, you have come back to AP with a wonderful sonnet which reads smoothly and imparts calmness. The form is perfect, and there is just a teeny typo, disolves.
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No one on God's green earth (including Bill Shakespear)burrows their way to my heart with a simple sonnet like you do Mary,that be the simple truth...
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beautiful. I love the melody that runs through this adding to the imagry and metaphor. lending your verse a tint of the beautiful.
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Dear Mary,
The early Italian sonneteers would have related well to this beautifully sincere expression of love which is exactly what the sonnet form was designed to convey.
It is such a joy to read another of your immaculately crafted sonnets. As always, your meter is impeccable, your rhyming inventive, your words well-chosen and your thoughts full of beauty.
I love your volta which changes, from musing in the third person, to a direct address to the beloved, then reverts to third person for the couplet.
Although numbered already as your own number 55, would you grace my Wyleian Sonnet Collection by adding the suffix "Wyleian Sonnet CLXXXVI" to the exisiting title
(leaving your own number LV in place, please.)?
Thankyou for writing and sharing this beautiful work
which is a splendid example of Sonnetto d'amore.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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Thank you so much for reading! I will add the new title with great appreciation.
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The appreciation is mine.
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