Splitting hairs upon the midnight hour
Interwoven in a womb of a fowel revolting creature
Time spent in this enclosed space has grown sour
And my scars are my least appealing features
I must get free, I must get out of this horrible nightmare
I’ll rip my way out if I must
I need to breathe my candid air
The day becomes dawn then to dusk
My misery is a thoughtless integer
So much I must endure
But its all because I love “her”
So innocent, so pure.....
Conceived
Born into Hell
Throbbing heart pulses tightly ravaging and
The stars shined brightly as they fell
Asphalt flavor after taste
Of a carroded flesh piece
Set upon the ghastly cold hard ground
On hospital bed sheets
Forsaken
And pulsating splashes of melancholy
Searching the walls of a latent womb
Cursed and willing to agree
A unfathonable wish or dream
To be unchained, unshackled, and free
A requisitioned mind set
A supplication, a plea
I wish ..
To be free...
A wish..
A longing...
To disengage...
Reincarnated acts....
Of redemption... From this melancholy womb
A contest entry
- Darkest by Shiro Okami.
816 points, ended March 1, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want your best. by Temprance.
600 points, ended March 20, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the word use yet the poem as a whole just doesnt seem to work, or at least not for me.
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NICELY DONE!
Deep stuff you have penned here. I sooo enjoyed reading and commenting on this fine piece of poetic pie! sweet
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This is very good. Well done.
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oh and i forgot!
the part that says
"And my scars are my least appealing features"
i think scars are beautiful (morbid freak.. i no im sorry) but they show that your human and that u hurt too..
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no your right and your not a morbid freak...I just wanted to say that it in a bad way
o well -
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is a morbid freak && loves it 
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speachless
darlz! this is hella good.. wow.. i love the darkness and imagery u put into it.. i especialy loved
"I must get free, I must get out of this horrible nightmare
I’ll rip my way out if I must
I need to breathe my candid air
The day becomes dawn then to dusk"
its.. just.. i dunno.. im drawn to it. its thissss good *stretches arms as far as they go* pluuuus lots more
hehe, another great peace from my lovely brother
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"My misery is a thoughtless integer
So much I must endure
But its all because I love “her”
So innocent, so pure....." is my favorite part great write
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Wow, that's deep. I hope this means you're getting past your writers' block? Overall, I liked this one. As I was reading it, I had a feeling of being trapped. Great work ^_^
Cheers,
Sherri
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