Oh! The dazzling moon this night
Does glow with melancholic light
I watch the stars spell out my gloom
While I site alone in this empty room
The painted walls are pale and bare
Coldness lingers in the air
Twice will Monday mourning come
Before we will meet again my love
Twice will Tuesday’s tears of rain
Decorate my window pane
Before the sun will shine again
A distant melody floats on the breeze
A lonely chord in my memory
For no symphony will play this week
As love is too far from my reach
A solitary rhyme dances in the dark
Waltzing through my saddened heart
Twice will Wednesday embrace my soul
Before you come and warm the cold
Twice will Thursday come and go
While I sit and dream alone
Before the sun will once more glow
But oh! The ice around this room
Will trap me in this dreadful tomb
And twice will Friday hold me tight
As lonely tears bleed from my eyes
Twice will the long week end
Then we’ll meet once more, dear friend
And the sun will shine again
~The sun will finally shine again~
Please tell me what you think
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wOW THAT IS A VERY NICE POEM it is a two reader which means it is very good. Everything is very even adn the meter is really good. Excellent!
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Outstanding write
The love the concept of the days of the week. To weave your tale. A sad write with great detail of your flowing words. I really enjoyed this amazing write. I will read more of your great work. (Lisa)
"Twice will Monday mourning come
Before we will meet again my love
Twice will Tuesday’s tears of rain
Decorate my window pane
Twice will Wednesday embrace my soul
Before you come and warm the cold
Twice will Thursday come and go
While I sit and dream alone
And twice will Friday hold me tight
As lonely tears bleed from my eyes"
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so much imagery......very very insightful and i loved it!!!!!!!!!! write more so i can comment.......simply stunning.
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Incredible
I really really really enjoyed this poem. excellent rhythm and flow through out the poem. the rhyming was quite tasteful as wlel. good work all round with this poem. the title is quite interesting and yet also the 1st line to the last line really summed this poem up quite nicely. keep up the Grrrrrreat work and much enjoyed your poetry. have a Grrrrrrrrrrrreat one. XoXoXoXoXoXoXo Paul
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Loving the half rhymes - the rythem is great. X
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this is such a nice poem, i loved the ending
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thank you for reading and commenting. Much appreciated! take care, Sam (dreams27)
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