i trampled over my dreams that i left under glitter coated nightmares and sang a tune with death. he poured me a cup of black coffee that looked more like mud and hummed the same line over and over again.
we danced inbetween the yellow lines beneath stars and streetlamps. [even those shooting stars couldn't save me now]the city was up in flames behind us. it somehow lit up the horizon like never before and in that moment i knew that time wasn't on my side even though i really knew that my whole life.
we moved past my childhood and into my mistakes, death making me relive the devistation like a movie on the bigscreen only this film was staring my right in the face. i cleared my throat and i stared death in the face, before i got out a word he told me it was time to go.
and with that my life was on pause, my voice on mute and i was falling through the earth, landing face first at the gates of hell.
Author notes
this is the best i had ://
A contest entry
- [it's the end of the world.] by -foreverandever.
535 points, ended February 27, 2007, 16 entries
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Grrrrrreat.
"and with that my life was on pause, my voice on mute and i was falling through the earth, landing face first at the gates of hell."
That's so great.
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I like the format.
"the city was up in flames behind us. it somehow lit up the horizon like never before and in that moment i knew that time wasn't on my side even though i really knew that my whole life."
--best lines I feel. I can see this and feel me being there. The fires at the end of the world will be beautiful for a moment before the panic. -
and it fits the theme of my contest exactly.
brutally honest and raw, reading it is like diving into your thoughts.
i like how it's written, simplistic but still full of amazing metaphors.
thank you for entering
& good luck
♥
ps. i know this is an anonymous contest but your writing gives you away sweetie hehe
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