She sits there
Hiding behind a mask
This face she shows
Is a mask to hide the fear
To hide the pain
To hide the tears
Her hair in her face
You can’t see her eyes
She doesn’t move
She’s like a stone statue
Frozen in time
No emotions are shown
No nothing at all
She’s burning inside
Her soul aching to be free
She longs for more
And knows she’ll never get it
She is a prisoner
Of a war raging inside her
Hate grows and burns her mind
No one will let her be herself
Outside everything is dead
She feels dead too
So cold and numb
Not a sound escapes her lips
But inside she’s screaming
Her heart is bleeding
Her freedom is lost
She knows she’ll never be free
She knows she’s a victim
Of pain
She’s gone too far into the fire
To be saved ever again…
A contest entry
- Emotions[:Options:]Broken Promises&&the Tears by WishMeAway--x.
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Thank you for taking the time enter and good luck to you!
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Even if it's rather cliched, I enjoyed this line "No emotions are shown" - lovely internal rhyme. Breaking this up in to stanzas might help it read easier.
However, this piece is over twenty lines so it will not win in my contest. Feel free to enter something else.
DancingRed.
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This isn't one of the ones that captured my attention, not to say it isn't good, just not quite what I'm looking for. Thanks for then entry.
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Outside everything is dead
She feels dead too
So cold and numb
Not a sound escapes her lips
But inside she’s screaming
Her heart is bleeding
Her freedom is lost
i loved those lines. and i know this, far too well.
great job on this and good luck
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Nice. I really love this sis. It's so true.
Bella VonSick
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"No emotions are shown
No nothing at all"
Great rite! love it!
pretty sad tho...
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this is heartbreaking and touching.. the emotion in this just pour out to the reader.. really well done poem
shanelle -
Well written poem. Very sad. Keep up the good writes
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