bones in locked embrace
unchanging in shifting sand
Love beyond decay
Author notes
It wasn't sand of course - this was dug up by archeologists out of the ground, but I wanted to sound poetic and also capture the shiftiness of the ground and time compared to the lasting nature of these bones.
If anyone can come up with a better line, let me know.
In a list
A contest entry
- Expressions of Haiku by silverscent.
360 points, ended February 26, 2007, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow! this is such a good haiku!!!! my favorite part of the piece was the way you ended it "Love beyond decay"! this piece was definitely worthy of the trophy it won!!!!! thank you sooo much for entering my contest!!! excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!!!!!!!!
-Steve-
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Oh how very nice to read this haiku! I have seen this picture too in the newspapers and it just touched my heart so much to see how 2 people were so very close to one another. That is LOVE! It was a scene one cannot forget so soon. So glad someone has penned a 'ku about it. A lovely haiku. The first line draws the reader in and holds his attention. Haiku do not have titles, so my only suggestion is to remove 'Prehistoric love' and replace it with L1 which is what is usually done by all haijin. Lovely alliteration in L2. A memorable aha moment in L3 closes the poem beautifully! Congratulations on the Silver trophy!
All the best,
Charishma
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Along with the image it's a compelling write. Good use of form and unique subject. Thanks for entering.
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Yes, poet, this is poetic. It is also surreal. I love the graphic and know that oft times we forget that the Master has designed it all to suit his whims. The "embrace" of these two, evidently lovers is awesome and you have capture that essence with a flair! Outstanding work!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Awesome!
This peice is wonderful! It is just so perfect! Short Sweet and to the point!
Great Write
Keep it up!
The Brit Brit -
I really like this one (^^)
nice job (^^)
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Thanks! And thanks for stopping by too!
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