Im sitting here, shedding my tears
i cant wait for it to be over
slit my wrists and hope to die
pull that tie harder round my neck
pushing you all away,
wish you could see how much im hurting
i dig my blade in deeper
i dont care about anything anymore
everything burns in my mind
i wish i was dead
nothing left in this life
walking through life un noticed
well not anymore....
you'll be crying my name
now that im gone....
Please tell me what you think
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love it...very good word play! But can I give you a word of advice? I'm only tryin to help...instead of saying "I cut my wrist and hope to die" say something like "Feeling the intense satisfaction on my wrist, I lay back and say my final goodbye" or something like that...describe the scene. Don't spell it out. Use words to describe what your trying to say rather then just saying "she cut her wrist and died" ya know? It makes it sound much better and the message your trying to get across will be much more clear...if your confused, read some of my poetry. You'll see what I'm talking about! But good poem and keep writing!
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