Insane by Amera at All poetry

Depraved, I’m the sloth that enters your mind
A purulent puss they call me insane
The mucilage keeping your fears entwined
Depraved, I’m the sloth that enters your mind
I’m the voice of hate that will make you blind
Twisting your soul as I nest in your brain
Depraved, I’m the sloth that enters your mind
A purulent puss they call me insane

Author notes

Art Work by: Jim Warren

Triolet

A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.

Make writing a Triolet more challenging! Make each line 8 syllables in length (4 metrical feet), written in iambic tetrameter (the more common way), or try it in pentameter (English version) where each line only has 10 syllables(5 metrical feet).

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A contest entry

Insanity by Dmonik. 3000 points, ended May 4, 31 entries
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Dmonik
April 30

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A well written, and perpetual notion of Insanity being a one true constant.
This is excellent work. Thanks for your entry, and Good Luck.

'D'
Swan song
December 21, 2007
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Wow a dark triolet and good to. You scare me once in awhile sweetie bird! LOL
Agent of Purgatory
November 24, 2007

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Twisted Isn't from being crazy
it is what happens when we are tethered to life with all it's entanglements.If cutting the cords is considered insane then at least I am a free puppet.

Twisted form for a twisted contest.I clap for it like this.Because I think they are coming to take me away and I want to seem like i am enjoying myself outside the Sanatarium.
poeticweaver
July 26, 2007

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This Rocks!
I think I've met you before, the sloth in my brain, that's driving me insane, up in flames, say my name, say my name..lol.. What a clever triolet! I enjoyed this walk on the dark side, I always do! Thanks for sharing, and pen on!

-Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo
badddgirl
June 30, 2007

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Ok this I am in a basement all by myself, commenting on entries for my contests and BAM I open this page and had the SHIT scared out of me and now I dont wanna be down here anymore!!
LOL

OK OK I do have to say, this is very different, unique, and in great style.

Thanks for freaking me out!
Good luck!
AutumnsFlame
June 3, 2007

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Hmmm... a form poem... This wasn't very long, and that's cool. Your imagery here is pretty darn good... I wish there was more to it though kinda.... besides that, I enjoyed this. Thank you very much for entering my contest and good luck.
macandrew
April 11, 2007

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I am a big HP Lovecraft fan and this triolet fits his genre perfectly.

Nicely penned.
John
Viyanna Rosemarie
April 7, 2007

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i would like to congratulate you on the gold trophy you have earned in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
- Amera
  April 7, 2007
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  thank you
MessedupMarionette
March 24, 2007

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Wow.
Ok, this is great. I looooooove it. Great job. I love the artwork too--is that yours?

Thanks for entering, and good luck!
- Amera
  April 7, 2007
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  Thanks, The art work is from Jim Warren. It will be worth your time to spend some time on his site.
  http://www.jimwarren.com/index.html
Sacrificial Love
February 20, 2007

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For some reason...
all I could think of with this piece... is racism...

I guess it makes sense...

since it is a very ugly monster eh?

This is outstanding...

reminded me I never was able to go in and edit the triolet I did like you said...

xo
Sahabah
seasonsoflove
February 19, 2007

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"I’m the voice of hate that will make you blind
Twisting your soul as I nest in your brain"
great part! love the imagery... overall, great work, Amera!
Jenn
- Amera
  February 19, 2007
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  hehe... thanks
Touchof1der
February 19, 2007

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The repetition works well here. I enjoy seeing that in a poet’s work and it was the first thing that caught my eye here. I also admit that the background was just way too cool. It’s not one I could write something for so I can appreciate that. You did it so well here. You were the only person in the contest to tackle this option. Thank you for taking the time and making the effort to enter my contest. Good luck!
♥ Touchof1der
- Amera
  February 19, 2007
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  Thank you it was fun working this into a Triolet.
And Hyetal
February 19, 2007
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Coolio! But maybe too complicated for me!

Cassie
- Amera
  February 19, 2007
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  LOL, not complicated, you're just sane.
- - And Hyetal
    February 19, 2007
    
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    I meant the poetry form. The poem I could understand... I thought I was going insane once... I'm still insane!
PerVirtuous
February 19, 2007

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Insane is a feeling I am familiar with. It is what happens when you talk to me. Except my insane is the good kind of insane and this is the bad kind, like James Ensor experienced. Three very psychotic bunnies for you.
LadyLavender
February 18, 2007
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twisted, A haunting...Deep!

Love it!
Dalaney
February 18, 2007

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totally creepy background (love it) and the poem
itself made me want to itch (?) If you don't win
this contest, then I say, to hell with them...they're
insane. Love, Lane
- Amera
  February 18, 2007
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  hehe... thanks Lane
Peteskid
February 18, 2007

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a difficult form factor here
it is difficult to send a message in this form but you seem to have done it here and well... very nice very skillful
- Amera
  February 18, 2007
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  Thanks, this artist inspires me.
February 18, 2007

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Brilliant
Your use of words drives mere mortals to the dictonary... Such insane imagery... Such a tasty dark poem to curl up to! You princess enter my mind and drive me insane.