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Summers, bewitching dreams

The seasons change, and so it seems
soft breezes, summers, bewitching dreams-
glowing upon the maiden of deep emotion
sun plunging, through the rippling ocean-----

Seasonal glories, in a sunset,
that shine hope, upon regret,
favonian breezes, sofly surround,
to my heart, whispered words, astound.
Waters, cojoling, a dream disparages,
emotions flowing --- calmly then rages,
slowly fading, in the nights beauty,
the sun, rests, from exigering duty.--

Desperate to stay, to feel affection
summer, does take a new direction,
seasonal perfection, fading soon
natures vision --  the suns opportune.
Dolphins from, the waves so deep,
in joyous chorus, for she, they weep,
glory in the warmth, that does bestow,
allow, their virgin tears, to gently flow,
lonesome thoughts, washed away in a wave
the suns reflection, the dolphins crave------

The seasons change, and so it seems
soft breezes, summer, bewitching dreams
glowing upon the maiden of deep emotion
the sun plunges, through the rippling ocean.


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  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    August 12, 2007

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    great write! I really like this piece! I can definitely see how it won those trophies! Great Job! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!


    -Steve-


  • Tangled Angle
    July 21, 2007
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    Nice poem, thanks for entering, good luck.

  • wendymolly
    June 24, 2007

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    definitely worthy of a few gold trophies! keep entering! there is a distinct summery feeling of awsomed moods that you have brought with such endearing summer thoughts! i love the overall way in which you have described the perfect summery emotions. you seem to have a very natural gift in writing fantastic freewrite. your imagery is far better than my own and that is the kind i love to taste and eat up all day long!


  • CinematicInk
    June 20, 2007
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    eloquent vocabulary! I take pleasure in the title as well!


  • Gasp
    May 18, 2007

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    i love this words you use in this poem, great job! ty for entering!

    ~!~keep writing~!~

    ~gasp~


  • xXxWorthlessxXx
    May 18, 2007
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    very great write. very deserving of the gold. thanks so much for entering


  • Death of the Author
    May 12, 2007

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    Wow I picked this because it had won a Gold and I was not disappointed, it is excellent. The flow is really smooth and you've got some very different, imaginative rhymes in there so well done. I am just off now too! I also noticed that you've only been on here for about 3 months and you've won twice as many trohpies as me, which, really isn't fair!! Lol, you certainly deserve them based on this. Well keep it up and I can say that if I had the power I would definitely publish your work! So, good luck with that and take care xxxOxxx


  • BeautifullyxTragic
    May 3, 2007
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    This is really good! It's very descriptive, and you worded it well.


  • Lollilou2
    March 22, 2007

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    Amazing

    I actually love this poem. It follows a pattern, follows a theme, has good form and I really enjoyed reading it.

    One part didn't quite follow the rhyme which I found my eyes getting stuck on...

    Waters, cojoling, a dream disparages,
    emotions flowing --- calmly then rages

    This is the only criticism I could possibly make about it.
    I love the continuance of the title throughout your poem, it fits in so well and its a pleasure to read.

    Fantastic entry, good luck in the contest.


  • metalmadness7666
    February 22, 2007

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    First off thanks s much for the comment and im glad u liked my poem.
    i really like this one it shows emotion.
    it is like it tells a story
    a very emotional special story
    flow is great
    this is my fav part
    "Dolphins from, the waves so deep,
    in joyous chorus, for she, they weep,
    glory in the warmth, that does bestow,
    allow, their virgin tears, to gently flow,
    lonesome thoughts, washed away in a wave
    the suns reflection, the dolphins crave------"
    i love it
    keep up the good work


    • th3sl4y3r
      February 22, 2007
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      Thank you so much for the wonderful comment and applause... peace and light always Krissi


  • Zanark
    February 18, 2007
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    All your poems are so great I added you as a fav


  • azlyn gold member
    February 18, 2007

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    A beautiful write here. The flow of your words and the rhymes were so perfect. I love that line,"soft breezes, summer, bewitching dreams". This was a mesmerizing work. Best of luck to you!!!
    Blessings,
    Azlyn


  • Whyitt U
    February 18, 2007

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    Very nicely written...third one with dolphins, and I don't even like dolphinslol Well done, Thanks for enterng. Good Luck.

    Whyitt Uxxx

    • th3sl4y3r
      February 18, 2007
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      thank you for your kind comments... I wasn't sure how to do a poem for a contest, there are many rules in the contest here... I'm glad you enjoyed my dolphins too, lol.. peace and light always Krissi

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