The seasons change, and so it seems
soft breezes, summers, bewitching dreams-
glowing upon the maiden of deep emotion
sun plunging, through the rippling ocean-----
Seasonal glories, in a sunset,
that shine hope, upon regret,
favonian breezes, sofly surround,
to my heart, whispered words, astound.
Waters, cojoling, a dream disparages,
emotions flowing --- calmly then rages,
slowly fading, in the nights beauty,
the sun, rests, from exigering duty.--
Desperate to stay, to feel affection
summer, does take a new direction,
seasonal perfection, fading soon
natures vision -- the suns opportune.
Dolphins from, the waves so deep,
in joyous chorus, for she, they weep,
glory in the warmth, that does bestow,
allow, their virgin tears, to gently flow,
lonesome thoughts, washed away in a wave
the suns reflection, the dolphins crave------
The seasons change, and so it seems
soft breezes, summer, bewitching dreams
glowing upon the maiden of deep emotion
the sun plunges, through the rippling ocean.
Author notes
Contest option 3.
OPTION 3 . summer
A contest entry
- Poetry from the heart ( 3 options) by Lollilou2.
370 points, ended April 10, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm Bored, So Here are a Bunch of Options by BeautifullyxTragic.
600 points, ended May 19, 2007, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 649 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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great write! I really like this piece! I can definitely see how it won those trophies! Great Job! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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Nice poem, thanks for entering, good luck.
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definitely worthy of a few gold trophies! keep entering! there is a distinct summery feeling of awsomed moods that you have brought with such endearing summer thoughts! i love the overall way in which you have described the perfect summery emotions. you seem to have a very natural gift in writing fantastic freewrite. your imagery is far better than my own and that is the kind i love to taste and eat up all day long!
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eloquent vocabulary! I take pleasure in the title as well!
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i love this words you use in this poem, great job! ty for entering!
~!~keep writing~!~
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very great write. very deserving of the gold. thanks so much for entering
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Wow I picked this because it had won a Gold and I was not disappointed, it is excellent. The flow is really smooth and you've got some very different, imaginative rhymes in there so well done. I am just off now too! I also noticed that you've only been on here for about 3 months and you've won twice as many trohpies as me, which, really isn't fair!! Lol, you certainly deserve them based on this. Well keep it up and I can say that if I had the power I would definitely publish your work! So, good luck with that and take care xxxOxxx
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This is really good! It's very descriptive, and you worded it well.
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Amazing
I actually love this poem. It follows a pattern, follows a theme, has good form and I really enjoyed reading it.
One part didn't quite follow the rhyme which I found my eyes getting stuck on...
Waters, cojoling, a dream disparages,
emotions flowing --- calmly then rages
This is the only criticism I could possibly make about it.
I love the continuance of the title throughout your poem, it fits in so well and its a pleasure to read.
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First off thanks s much for the comment and im glad u liked my poem.
i really like this one it shows emotion.
it is like it tells a story
a very emotional special story
flow is great
this is my fav part
"Dolphins from, the waves so deep,
in joyous chorus, for she, they weep,
glory in the warmth, that does bestow,
allow, their virgin tears, to gently flow,
lonesome thoughts, washed away in a wave
the suns reflection, the dolphins crave------"
i love it
keep up the good work
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment and applause... peace and light always Krissi
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All your poems are so great I added you as a fav
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A beautiful write here. The flow of your words and the rhymes were so perfect. I love that line,"soft breezes, summer, bewitching dreams". This was a mesmerizing work. Best of luck to you!!!
Blessings,
Azlyn
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Very nicely written...third one with dolphins, and I don't even like dolphinslol Well done, Thanks for enterng. Good Luck.
Whyitt Uxxx
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thank you for your kind comments... I wasn't sure how to do a poem for a contest, there are many rules in the contest here... I'm glad you enjoyed my dolphins too, lol.. peace and light always Krissi
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