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Baby Girl

On the outside watching
Wanting to come in
Missing you so much
Dreaming of back then

At a loss for how
Trying hasn't worked at all
Praying for just a smile
As my hopes quickly fall

Crying on the inside
Not letting it show
Wanting to show my love
But, how, I no longer know

Praying for your forgiveness
For all the things I've done
Regretting my mistakes
Like pushing away my number one

Remembering how we talked
And how I held you when you cried
Seeing you shove me away
Watching as my heart died

Author notes

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This was written for my daughter. She'll be 15 in April and I have made so many mistakes with her that I'm not proud of! We used to have such a great relationship, but, now we are so far apart! I miss the closeness that once was!!

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  • All u wanted me 2 b
    March 20, 2007
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    Hmm..wow. I feel as if this could've been written from my mother's point of view to me. I'm 15 as well and we have an extremely broken relationship.


    Truly heartbreaking write..thanks for entering it.


    • DenyMyLove
      March 20, 2007
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      Thank you for commenting!! I'm sorry that you relate so closely, though! I can tell you from my own experiences that, although, I've made alot of mistakes with my daughter they were NOT intentional! If I could go back and change them I would because then I would know what not to do. PLEASE, try not to be to hard on your mom. She may be feeling as awful and inadequate, as a mother, as I am.
      ~DAWN~


  • GoingCoastal
    February 24, 2007
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    I can get your pain in this read, relates to many a parent. Great work.


  • mon amour ange
    February 24, 2007

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    This a beautifully written poem. Apologizing is sometimes one of the hardest things for a person to do, and yet, here you have written a beautiful and inspiring piece doing just that! Great job!
    ~Mon Amour Ange


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 24, 2007

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    sorry is a hard word to say

    but in this poem it comes out rather easily and honestly.. a very nice short poem here..very well done


  • Jadeheart 41
    February 24, 2007

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    Heartfelt wording!!

    I have a 16 yr old daughter and know this feeling all to well!! Thank you for sharing such beautiful thoughts and feelings... I am sure your daughter will come back around you will see.. Thank you for sharing your worries and pain with all .. your not alone on this one..


    • DenyMyLove
      February 24, 2007
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      Thanks! It's nice to know that I'm not alone with my teenager!


  • wings of an angel
    February 20, 2007

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    Dawn, This is a great poem written from your heart I can tell, I can sympathize I have a 15 year old son and I think its not us I think its them growing up and rebellious I finally learned that myself, my son does not come to me as he use to I think its part of the teen years. Your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully throughout the entire poem, good luck in the contest well done dear poet


    • DenyMyLove
      February 20, 2007
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      Thank you so much, Wings!!!! I just hope that someday our relationship goes back to what it was before!


  • Lovely 2
    February 17, 2007

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    What an absolute astounding poem! If anything you should let her read this. It's very touching. Lots of love in this poem, I hope she can feel that.

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