Don't Do As I Do... Do As I Say!

Leaving footprints like craters,
the moose struggles on and on,
taking nothing for granted,
he looks back at his son.

"Lift your feet up higher
don't slouch as you walk,
nothing looks as ungainly,
as a moose on the stalk."

"I am trying, I am trying,"
the eager, young moose said,
then almost choked in the next breath
as his father fell on his head.

"Are you trying a sommersalt?"
the inexperienced one did say,

"of course not, said the father,
I am kneeling down to pray!"

A contest entry

There's A Moose On The Loose by CarolDesjarlais. 700 points, ended February 18, 2007, 15 entries
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Zero the Hero
April 2, 2007
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brilliant you made me smile with thia ..nice humour... nice one
CarolDesjarlais
February 18, 2007

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this has a gret moral....nicely written, I enjoyed it very much.... dang if I have not stumbled and watched my chidlren do what I do better. Godo write.
Whisper Mckee
February 17, 2007
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Funny ...great write, rymes well
tigerrose110203
February 17, 2007
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i like that.
Sunshine Always
February 17, 2007
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Oh Katie, I wish I had a pound for everytime this has happened to me with my children.You just have to come up with something don't you. Brilliant for all ages and thank you my dear friend for the smile......Great big hugs...mal