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Broken Love

I felt myself changing
I felt no pain
I felt my anger rising
I felt this was a game
I felt my inner wolf
I felt it coming out
I felt my eyes turn black
I felt myself growl
I felt your flesh between my teeth
I felt your blood flow over my tongue
I felt your scream rush through my ears
And then it was over -- sorry, hun

Author notes

okay i really like this poem, even if it isn't very scary. if you don't like it, let me know.

Option 1 because of the title but it does fit. Never tick a werewolf off, especially dealing in love.

obviously, this is from the POV of a lycan.

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  • upperworld06
    October 24, 2008
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    cool, lots of feeling lol. good job and good luc


  • DeepinRage
    July 31, 2007

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    Well I like the flow of the words but like I told one of the other poem entries...the repetitivenes is ok with me but other people may look down upon it!


  • NickelleteXninja
    May 31, 2007

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    one thing i dont like hon is hun.... its very out there...Nicely done but it’s really short. I like longer poems and with what you captured and the imagery you showed here, I’m sure you could add more and make it twice as good.


  • Forlorn Dreams
    May 26, 2007

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    thanks for entering my contest! i love werewolves, and you poem had a great plot. good luck!
    ~Kelcey


  • Dark Whispers
    April 5, 2007
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    Although I was hoping for something new for my contest
    this still is a great entry.
    thanks for entering in my contest .
    great write.

  • Dark Whispers
    April 5, 2007

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    It works very well,your Imagination must run wild. ~lol~ This was a great poem, but try to be a little more descriptive though and you would knock my socks off.


  • joleahe
    February 24, 2007
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    nice sis. about how it is too...lol.

  • hose30
    February 17, 2007

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    great imagination. I loved this. Can you give me feedback on my poem I can only be me. This was brillant and I liked it. lot of imagery.

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