I can only be me, I've always said.
There is nothing you can do;
to change these thoughts in my head.
I tried to live someone else's life.
The pain in my heart cuts like a knife.
You wanted to destroy what in my heart.
Can't you see this is tearing me apart.
I tried that way, but it wasn't me.
Internal pain and heart ache is all I see.
I Peered inside and saw the person within.
I have to leave you if I want to mend.
I realized who I truly want to be.
I don't need you and now I truly free.
I can only be me, I've always said.
There is nothing you can do;
to change these thoughts in my head.
A contest entry
- Options 4 All by Truthful Princess.
1150 points, ended March 23, 2007, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - *** Untitled Contest *** by Hebz.
425 points, ended September 21, 2007, 74 entries
Honorable mention
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very nice poem. i like the idea of not changing who you are for anyone. great work and thank you for the entry!
Anger Inside 201 -
WOW, Amazing!!!
I like this piece alot,so attitude shown...
thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
Congrats on the trophy, easily relatable subject matter, the determination to be yourself with no influence from anyone. A very good way to be. Love, C
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Very well written!!!! Don't ever let someone change you into who they want you to be! They either love you for who you are or the don't!!!! Good luck!!!!
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Right on! Nobody should tell us who we're supossed to be. We can always try, see what works, but the only one person in our lives who determines how we should change, can only be ourselves. Great message here!!!! More people need to just be themselves, and stop trying to fit some mold.
*R
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Awesome
When I first started reading this poem I knew it was going to be about trying to be yourself which is great. I could really relate to the feelings that you expressed in this poem. I loved how the first stanza was repeated as the last. The title also did a great job summing up what the poem was about.If I had to grade this it would be an 85% -
very good
I have been there before. with girls and my mother. i think everyone feels this way at one time.
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wow
I feel this way now. THankz for the poem. Really good write. Well done! Thankz for your comments on my poem 'The wars on the streets' It was really nice.
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I LIKE THIS WRITE IT EXPRESSES HOW EVERYBODY WANT US TO BE AN IMAGE OF THEM BUT WE CAN ONLY BE OURSELF AND THEY DONT UNDERSTAND THAT BRAVO WRITE
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awsome wat can i say you a beatiful writter
blessed be
lil -
very nice piece
it's true. you can only be you, and I liked how you displayed it,
one suggestion "tried to be someone else" maybe should be "try"
or without the quotes... because it's past tense, and yeah.
but this was lovely to read and I hope you do well in the contest!
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Fantastic...stay true to yourself, and those who try to change you aren't really your friends in the first place!
"Tried to be someone else"
I listened to your words.
You wanted to change me.
Said I wasn't good enough.
That was really my favorite part, and the last stanza brought it together fantastically! You have done a great job here...good luck!!
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this is very different and very good. well so i think. i like the way that you put things like, "I realized who I am. I dont need you in my life. I cant be you!!!" You can never be what you are not and it is good to find that you have seen that. never fall into a false world for another, that is what I say. Keep writing.
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Wonderful, your flow and verbiage is easy to read creating a vivid image. You gave insight to yourself which is a plus in a poem Nice work.
Amera -
i liked it a lot
very emotial lots of people want to change you
just be your self in the end you have no choice
thanks for your comment Ron
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thumbs up
i had a friend who had a fiance like that. it didnt work out needless to say. it was a great poem very well said
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well done!
I really like that, really good job. People who try and change us are worth nothing
Great write
Bec x.x.x
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Great Job! It's very relatable, at least to me. I totally agree that you cant be someone you're not. Keep up the great writing.
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