The tears keep falling
They just won’t stop
My heart keeps stalling
Its failing fast
Without you here
I can’t survive
We hurt each other
We cant go back
We got so deep
And we just lost track
Listening to the cricket’s
Beautiful music
It’s the last sound I’ll hear
Because without you
Its too much to bear
So when you get here
It’ll be too late
I’ll be waiting for you
At heaven’s gate
I must say sorry
For all I did wrong
But there’s no time for that
It’d take to long
So I’ll let you go now
And let you live your life
Away from me
Away from strife
I’ll be gone
But that’s alright
Because without me
It’ll be an easier life.
Author notes
Gorgeouscatastrophe [my name used to be musicangel16]
A contest entry
- Evanescence by requiempoet.
340 points, ended February 20, 2007, 15 entries
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Ahh I see...I finally found your dark stuff, LOL Izanah needs to lighten up, right?
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ha ha
yeah, i wrote a lot of this stuff during my emo phase... ha ha i should probably get rid of it..
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this was a good poem but the ending wasn't relly an ending, if you know what I mean. it left u hanging in a way way but still I like it. thanks for entering
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i like it=]
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This was a good poem, but it kinda left you hanging at the end. I expected it to be longer. Otherwise I liked it. My favorite part was:
"So when you get here
It’ll be too late
I’ll be waiting for you
At heaven’s gate"
It looks like from your comments that that is the stanza everybody else liked too. Thank you so much for your wonderful entry and good luck in my contest. -
This isn't amazing...it's good, but not amazing...it strikes me as a guilt trip. Way too repetitive and the rhyming was off in some parts. Thanks for entering though.
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ummmm lets see it was perty good a lil rough is some spots with the rhyme and that but all in all i liked it it seemed a lil repetitive but good nice write
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my favorite part was:
"So when you get here,
It'll be too late,
I'll be waiting for you,
At heavens gate"
good job and thanks for entering my contest, i wish you luck in it. -
Nice!
I really liked the lines:
"So when you get here
It’ll be too late
I’ll be waiting for you
At heaven’s gate"
Keep up the good work, and good luck in my contest!
-Sally -
sounds like " October " but that could be because I'm listening to it now. But I do enjoy this poem...perhaps it would have been something that would have been on Origin!
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