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Darkness

I'm in a state of complete darknesss,

Down in the depths of nothingness.

 

Still like stone, anything but strong,
I never thought it would be this wrong.

But thought of you keep my heart beating,
Because of you the black is peeling.

Bitter and cold, frostbitten spirt,
Because of you, the light, there isnt.

As I lay unmoving, the dark creeps in,
And the Angel of Death slowly, starts to begin.

In complete darkness, my life starts to slip,
With you knowing, my heart, you keep.

The breathe in my lungs slinks away,
The color in my cheeks, starts to fade.

My body temperature drops, my warmth rises into the air,
My skin becomes cold, " All I did was love you, this isnt fair,".

My heart gets slower, the beats faint,
One last "thump" is the last it'll take.

Realizing my fate is final,
I think one last time of your decetful smile.

My eyes start to close, and a tear runs down my cheek,
Your name, never again, will I get to speak.

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  • forget my memories
    May 12, 2007

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    My eyes start to close, and a tear runs down my cheek,
    Your name, never again, will I get to speak.

    the end lines made this whole poem amazing as hell. i love the whole flow of the entire poem you did a great job threwout this whole write. thank you for entering my contest im sorry it took me so long to juge i had some personal things i had to take care of thank you againg for entering my contest and the best of luck to you as i finish up my juging.


  • JesusFreakNBandGeek
    February 18, 2007

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    I love this poem! Excellent imagery. Very relatable also. My body temperature drops, my warmth rises into the air,
    My skin becomes cold, " All I did was love you, this isnt fair,".
    My heart gets slower, the beats faint,
    One last "thump" is the last it'll take.
    Realizing my fate is final,
    I think one last time of your decetful smile.
    My eyes start to close, and a tear runs down my cheek,
    Your name, never again, will I get to speak.

    Those were my favorite lines, I believe. Great Job!


  • loveaswellashate
    February 16, 2007

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    Omgosh i loved this.. this so goes with what I am feeling right now.. thank you for entering and good luck...
    Laters
    Loves...*hugs*