As I smelled the air
I picked up the distinct smell of blood
rushing thru the rivers of life
though one of those smells
picked at my consciousness
like a mouse to cheese
Though this smelled nothing like cheese
it smelled like a sweet wine
intoxicating in all of its richness
My fangs burst free and I hunt for this smell
Nothing will stop me, for this blood that surpasses all others
The Ancients talk of this one person that makes you whole
even when vampire, they are the person that you will crave like no other
Their body runs you wild and their voice can bring you to a pool of humanity on the floor
Their personality complements yours to a point that you are finishing each other's sentences
But their scent is what will truly surpasses all reason
Their scent and their blood is filled with the pure ectasy
The need and the craving are absolute
and with time, does not diminish, but grows in intensity.
As I approached her in the hottest club in town, her body was beautiful beyond words,
her voice and laughter struck me to the core and I craved for it
like a oasis in the middle of the desert
As I returned to some semblance of myself,
I asked her to dance, all the while trying to keep myself from taking her hostage
She accepted and we flowed to the rhythm of the beat
With her, I could see the sounds around me and wrapped them around her
like a silken sheet that caressed her mind and aroused her senses
By the time that we had danced to two of the sultry songs,
the desire was so palpable, you could eat it like a succulent fruit
As I drawed her to me, and then to a private booth,
we caressed each other like long lost lovers,
though we had never met
As each kiss and nibble excited us further
the pinnacle was the bite, pure heaven
Though this seduction I had not planned
the feed was exquisite and divine
this woman was the goddess of my dreams
and the salvation of my soul.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Vampires and Blood! by okadadokie.
500 points, ended February 23, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blood Lust by Dorcha Runda.
600 points, ended February 25, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hmmm this is a very unique sense of way to write vampire poetry, I personally think its bloody amazing. Its very good choice of words, and the imagery, is bloody wounderful. Great write. Thanks for entering and good luck. Please read my rules.
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very nice
great imagry here...it sucked me in and held me until the end...very very nicely done!! I enjoyed reading this!
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A very in depth poem. Describing about ones desire for someone, and that the desire is so strong it pulls one's self into it as well. Great job. Good luck.
~Oka
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Interesting write. The bloodiness thereoff, well, that's not my taste of life. Once again, intriguing.
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intoxicating left me feeling slightly hot and bothered
i especially liked the line "i asked her to dance, all the while trying not to take her hostage" and "like a mouse to cheese" genius well done
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Have really never been into this genre, but did enjoy reading this poem - the steps involved in the seduction of this woman, of getting the blood one needs if one is a vampaire - easy to read and understand.
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