Smoke billows out behind his head
-Smoke of the bridges he burns and the cigarettes he lights hourly.
Every great western has its cowboy,
And he is him.
He is him.
You know the cowboy grin, right?
Well, he pretty much has that one down.
His gun gets stuck in his belt every time he tries to whip it out and
Do one of those spinny moves,
And the ladies snicker.
There's a line where art becomes pornography,
And he staggers down that line like a drunkard.
Humanity.
Author notes
inspired by the A.K.A.'s
In a list
A contest entry
- Cowboy Poetry by Maybe Anastasia.
390 points, ended March 16, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make It Musical... Word! by Classified Memories.
400 points, ended February 18, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Great metaphor you have used throughout these lines - very unusual. Great final two lines to conclude your write. Quite a different take on cowboy poetry.
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This is a different poem! I'm not sure I quite get the point of the whole thing. But I'm sometimes slow on some things. it made for an interesting read.
Peace
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Ah, I remember reading this piece, Samuel! I love the metaphor you used in this piece. So true it is that life mimics art and even more true that the line is fine between art and porn! Interesting piece from you and a pleasure to read again. Sorry the system won't let me applaud once more, because I'd send more clappies your way!
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There's a line where art becomes pornography,
And he staggers down that line like a drunkard
That's great. You always come up with really creative ways to phrase things and you have a knack for taking a character and really presenting a fantastic visual of them. Keep it up. -
interesting... my uncle writes alot of cowboy poetry, but i must confess i'm not as well versed in its styles as i should be. The poem was well done anyways, and i enjoyed it!
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Lots of imagery for me with twist and turns, a different read, it did though keep me reading till the end...
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This was definitely an interesting write coupled with the title. I think you should build up the comparison to art and pron a bit more. You tell us he walks that line, but I don't think you show us enough. We need a little more art, and who doesn't need a little more porn ;P I dunno, I guess I just want to see the cowboy built up a little more. It's a good base, now build a cowboy idol on top. >pixxie<
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with a bit of polishing this could be a winner, the title leads the way but is a couple bumps that need to be smoothed out, I like it though, has great potential in my opinion, some really sly humor here and is creative and unique.
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I guess i am not getting the cowboy humor. I think I am missing something because I don't see what the titlte has to do with the poem. The part about the gun being stuck in his belt every time he whips it out can be a metaphor pretaining to pornography. I got the mental image of a guy trying to whip out his willy but got stuck in his pants. Other than that, I just don't get it.
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fun
This is pretty good. I enjoyed going through it. The title seems to be doing all the trick. LOved it.
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I found this to be interesting, but a bit bumpy, good humor
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An interesting write. Very good imagery and flow. Enjoyed the humor. You paint a unique picture with this poem.
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OK, this one was different. A touch of humor and although a little bumpy, still cute in an off sort of way. I would definitely suggest refining L9, perhpas make it 'spin it like they do in the movies'. just a suggestion Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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umm... ok this is a nice poem. It just isn't what I was looking for. When I read this I think of the wanna bes and they are not real cowboys so it don't really fit.
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That's the whole point of the piece. This guy is an example of one of those wanna-bes, one of those fakers, notice the lines about his gun getting stuck and how he staggers down the Art-Pornography state line, so to speak. He himself is the fine line between art and pornography, the line between cowboy and not quite.
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This is great. I'm reminded of good-looking boys we used to call "drug-store cowboys," who used or tried to use the cowboy theme to pick up girls. Might not have been what you intended, but it is what I thought of while reading it. Charlynn
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Interesting write. The imagery you present brings the metaphor to life. Nicely done!
~Lori
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WOW!
just Amazing I love the flow of the lines, your talent really comes through in this write..keep writing!!
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This amazing! I love your words. I just get it, somehow. Excellent writing :-)
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