I’m sitting at the table writing this letter
eating this cake… it couldn’t be no mo better
wait a minute baby… some crumbs fell on my letter
baby your cake couldn’t be no mo better
I can bite into it all I want… it don’t matter
I bite and then stare at it… and its still yella
woman yo cake sho is good… aint no mo better
girl… I’ll eat yo cake in a storm… or any other weather
Lord knows when it comes to yo cake… it aint no mo better
so soft and sweet on my tongue… not tough like leather
Damn! I dun got some mo… on my letter
I got to go now… but when it come to yo cake… aint no mo better.
Author notes
2)Food! Anything about food!
“make mine a crispy #5”
In a list
A contest entry
- Could you cook the most delicious poem ever? by second-born.
500 points, ended June 1, 2007, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lots of options! by ForeverLastingComa.
450 points, ended May 7, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This poem is cute, i like the detials you have used and i like how you have used the slang too, it makes it more romantic, congratulations on your silver and bronze and good luck in this current contest also, as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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very inventive
good luck and thank you for the entry
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french letter by any chance? Love C
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Wow, this was quite fun and interesting. I really enjoyed the read.
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hey sorry for the confusion but can you please enter this contest instead
http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2403891
i am deleting this one
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O SHIT!! lolz..that was HOTT! I especially liked these lines,
"Girl… I’ll eat yo cake in a storm… or any other weather
Lord knows when it comes to yo cake… it aint no mo better
So soft and sweet on my tongue… not tough like leather
Damn! I dun got some mo… on my letter
I got to go now… but when it come to yo cake… aint no mo better."
you madfe me laugh a bit. At first I thought it sounded kind of slow but then I really did get into it!..thank you for entering and good luck
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Always liked dialect poems!
You dun good! Mo betta den wut I antsipaited! -
Heh this was a good one. I always like when a word or phrase is used multiple times. This did indeed make me laugh and that's what I like =)
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Yo poem sho is good.
Good work.
Bravo.
Good luck.
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Mo Better cake!!
I love this poem! I'm almost speachless! The humor, the love,The savoring of the womans love from her hands! it's great!
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and I think your poem is ain't no mo better!!! you remind me of Maya Angelou...maybe it's because of the style of writing...but I think it's more of the sincere and light approach you have in writing...keep cooking I mean keep writing!!!
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I liked this I really liked this a whole bunch- it sounds almost like a song- what a wonderful way to put into words your appreciation of the 'cake'-'Woman yo cake sho is good' -sounds like a savouring mouthful-one can almost taste it,'So soft and sweet '- makes me want to eat cake too and that too on the douible- so I will have to do some baking today
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I love this!
I also wish you'd write something else. I have begun to miss your pen sorely!
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Cute little ditty this is!
I wish you all the best in the contest! -
Oh Me
this is very provocative for cake
this was rappin good.You talented 
eater you.Enjoyed the read
as I bet you enjoyed writing it.good luck in your contest.
God Bless
~Cheryl~
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