So she's bouncing on a trampoline
Fulgent polka dot sunshowers
Raining down
in dazzling patterns
her curls
sparkle like a ballet dancer
Chocolate Cherry twinkles
That make milkshakes
with the vanilla
Unison of tropical creatures
Slender starfish hands
coiled in eachothers
His heart
has a glow
Delicious pink
melted berry nectar
Sugar & the taste of a waterfall.
They dance like astronauts
In luminous beams
of fruit salad dreaming.
I love you
you can watch me dance
dreamy girl
(maybe one day you
will dance with me
today
is all
you
have)
ice cream
and grapefruit
lush sugar
on them
sweet dripping
on skinny necks
& collarbones
Little fairies
sprouting
wings & orchids.
We will love
and swing in trees
emerald cocoon
paint rainbows on eachother
so we're neon
when it rains again.
Savage lovers
Mud makes our skin soft
Chocolate creations
together
always.
Until the end of time [now].
Author notes
So this is what I would do at the end of the world. Be happy like I dream, like I wish.
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A contest entry
- [it's the end of the world.] by -foreverandever.
535 points, ended February 27, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Forests and Explosions, this is over.
Comments
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this is absolutely amazing, girl.
ridiculously beautiful. i loved the imagery.
it makes me want to eat lots of candy.
<33!
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Ridiculous! You should write some sort of short story off of this... maybe I'll write a short story, if you don't mind a take-off on the basic idea. Honeychild, I'm inspired! And therefore continue to make typoes.
Anyways, this is so dreamlike. Almost haunting, I think... like an eerie happiness since theres really nothing else you can do. I can't really explain. Anyways, I really enjoyed this. I feel like it caught the essence of something that could be more expansive.
Super awesome job.
Man, what is w/ this contest? Everything is good.
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bewtiful <333
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no comment can explain how I feel about this.
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You're always so good with the yummy stuff. You use fresh and delicable words to sucker your readers in. I have a sweet tooth.
"her curls
sparkle like a ballet dancer
Chocolate Cherry twinkles
That make milkshakes
with the vanilla"
--flows brilliantly.
"Sugar & the taste of a waterfall."
--where do you come up with this stuff? Mmm ... sugary waterfalls.
"ice cream
and grapefruit
lush sugar
on them
sweet dripping
on skinny necks
& collarbones"
--sounds like a helluva good time.
"emerald cocoon
paint rainbows on eachother"
--yes, you're pretty ... maybe TOO pretty. Nah, gorgeous as always. I see you'd have no problem with facing the end.
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Thanks so much sweety! =] I dunno i didn't spend a long time on the wording I just let ideas run away and leap all over me I just let it be whatever. I was going to try to change it and make it more fancy but I decided I liked it that way. Thank you so much for liking it and all my strange sugar related words ^-^.
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the imagery is wonderful, creating vivid pictures, and it's intriguing to read.
'(maybe one day you
will dance with me
today
is all
you
have)' - love how that's sort of strung out, as if there's hardly any time left but you're going to waste it anyway.
beautiful.
thank you for entering,
& good luck
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^-^ thanks so much, your comment was so true and just like made my poem make sense to me. All I want is to relax and be me with someone I love and I just want to waste all I have on that. Thank you for showing me my poem ♥.
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