I had a dream last night.
My thoughts came out to play
To dance in the streetlight,
To gyrate and sway.
I stood in the dark and watched them
There was nothing to say
One of them approached me then
“You are not like other men,”
Said I, I don’t think I am.
“Surely you see the sense in what we do, life-denied?”
I, said I, think I do.
“The hollowness of men around you,
The Passion that confounds you,
The rage that sways you.
If this is reality, do we want any piece of it?”
Do we have a choice?
“There is always one. Shut out the noise
Draw a deep breath
Don’t let them confound you.”
I cried and said,
“
He nodded and understood. But of course he did.
“It’s hard,” he said, “To make your life a dud.
Unless you try.”
But surely, said I, you understand whereof I sit,
In a hollow land, all that I am, surrounded by mold and grit,
He smiled and said, “Now you see. There is life outside of me
And they,”
and he gestured to the others.
“They lead you astray
as often as not. But beware their
Coherence.”
Where,
I said,
Do I find resolution?
He glanced up and said,
“You know that too.”
And I did.
And I stepped forward, to a life of
(It seemed)
Fakery and trickery
But always my thoughts lingered
And some others besides
Dancing in the streetlight
Waiting to be set free.
Author notes
Another one that mystifies even me.
A contest entry
- Only the Dreamers really live. by Angierie.
425 points, ended March 21, 2007, 21 entries
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Interesting...leaves me wondering what you were feeling and who you were thinking of when you wrote this piece. Very dreamy and very creative.
~Lori
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Dreamy, but Incorpreal
This is an interesting read! Did you really have a dream like this, if so it seems almost abstract rather than concrete. The poem could benifit from a little better organization to captivate your audience and organize your ideas, this is only a suggestion, if you want to stick with the double space your more than welcome too it. I'm curious who the "he" character is in your dream, and what the significance of the character is. I'm going to read it again. If you want to work on it feel free to message me with your thoughts.
-Mal
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Dreams! they can and often do go in and out of clouds of thoughts..very well written and expressed!
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A very interesting look at what seems to be a wierd dreaming, it gets off to a great really start,and then as you yourself commented, in authors notes, it becomes mystifying, but then that's dreaming.
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Huh
You call this a poem? What ever happened to line,stanza,rhyme, meter and epiphany? Did you forget all these basics while you were dreaming? -
awesome
this freking sweet, cuase i do drama at school and i recently just finished studing theatre of the absurd, and this poem sounds so much like one of the plays i did. this is great, it gives you the feeling of a greater meaning as if there is a question behind the poem. well thats what i think.
well written, keep it up
emeraldsoldier
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Hey cool, I've taken influences from things I know nothing about.
Oh, and thanks, emeraldsoldier. 
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