If I could only finish what I began,
I'd have a hundred books.
I feel the farthest when I'm up close.
Perfect when I'm alone, but so are you,
when I'm alone.
I need you, when I'm alone.
But I don't speak right
when you're here.
And when you're there I know you're anywhere.
I want you here, until you are.
Who are you.
Just a person I imagine,
when I'm alone.
I'm always victorious,
when I'm alone.
Over you;
Who are you?
Just an enemy I imagine,
by myself.
I'm always sweet, when you're here.
When I'm alone, so are you.
A contest entry
- Show me pure loneliness and pain by ThunderCatWonder08.
390 points, ended March 13, 2007, 23 entries
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fantastic
o i loved thi poem -
'I am always victorious'..that stanza is out standing...good write ,you nani can offer more to A.P....keep writing
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Sometimes I don't understand life. I don't understand why we can all feel the same and yet none of us can relate to others.
You have a beautiful way or expressing this feeling.
"I need you, when I'm alone.
But I don't speak right
when you're here.
And when you're there I know you're anywhere.
I want you here, until you are.
Who are you."
I want to say that this is me. This is me and everyone else in the world who is willing to admit they are missing someone/thing in their life. Running in circles trying to understand why we get tounge tied and why we want people near all the time even if we'd rather be alone when we really don't want to..
So yes. This is me...and I'm sad to hear it you, too.
You have a very wonderful tallent. Keep up the good work.
<3Emily
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hey thanks
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Perfect when I'm alone, but so are you,
when I'm alone.
i like it. i especially like the above part. good job with writing this. good luck in the contest. enjoyed.
blu
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Wonderful.
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