Look into my eyes,
see the pain,
and let the blood flow.
I know how it hurts.
I know your secret.
He hurt me too.
SCREAM
Cause you aint
got nothin left.
Your dying there
on the bathroom floor
cause of the memories
that up in that room.
You left a note
on the bloody sink
"i tried to ask for help,
but the words
stuck in my mouth..."
you're no more
but you made them cry.
those cuts on your arms
where made by many tears.
you always lied
when they asked you
if you where fine.
now i found you
laying face down
holding onto his picture
still burning in your hand
He is paying for what he did
he touched you
and you're laying in hell....
you're not fine
you lied
Author notes
2.Write about over coming hard times...foster care, eating disorders, abuse.
A contest entry
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1150 points, ended March 23, 2007, 24 entries
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Comments
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Heart breaking write
I know this was hard for you to write because I have been through those times and I still cry at night. This poem was amazing and very descriptive. Please know if you ever feel like cutting I am here to talk to.If I had to grade this poem I would give you a 92% because no one is perfect but you're pretty close. -
This is a very sad poem, and the emotion and pain is strong in this. It's interesting that the point of view is from someone standing by rather than the person who is hurting themselves. It speaks to me indeed. Good job and good luck in the contest!
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Excellent job with this. I hope that I never suceed in an attempt because I wouldn't want my family to be traumatized like in your poem. Thanks for letting me see the other side of things. Take care. Great job, keep up the good work.
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you are welcome
i have tried so many times now it aint funny..........i know i need help.....so i looked at it as someone looking in
~~~~angel
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