Oh, how I love the water each day,
the calming effect, that soothes the soul!
I'm looking out, at the horizon here,
and admires the power I can't control
So I'm looking at the birds flying overhead.
On winged flight, they'll travel each day
Destinations: Only they know where to go.
Oh, to fly free, come and go as you may!
That scent of life continues to flow
How special, is the mist of the sea!
Softly, the winds roll the waves ashore,
Its inspiring, and such a mystery to me
For when humanity first opened its eyes
What a wonder, it had to be that day
Eons ago, indeed that was very special
for that is when, the first words came into play
Even today, the mist of the sea rolls on
Creating dreams, that is the rumor I've heard
For well before words were uttered that day
dreams were made into thoughts, now they're words
David
A contest entry
- Elements (Water, Fire, Earth, Air) by tabbykat10988.
600 points, ended February 27, 2007, 17 entries
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I think this was a lovely poem. I love how you describe the sea, not only in terms of its physical appearance, but also through the beginnings of it, when you mention humanity seeing it for the first time. I do think you should possibly consider using a bit more punctuation on the ends of lines than you used. Not necessarily something every line, but I do think it's important to still maintain grammatical sentences in your poetry. It's just a suggestion.
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So much can be felt and experienced from nature...one of the things that can bless our lives to the fullest. Thank you for this beautiful reminder! I wish you tons of luck in this contest! Smiles, Terry
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beautiful... i love how you told how the earth came to be through water... and your reference to words... fantastic... and it flows from one word to anther... great poem... i love the rhyme... and good luck in the contest...
-tabbykat
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