This is it
I couldn't be happier
I've waited my whole life
just for this
I'm all dressed up
and so is Sam
I can sense his excitement
he's ready to go
The announcer calls
our names
I let him go
and he flies out the gate
He's going to the first barrel
and turns smoothly
Now the second
perfect
Come on Sam!
one more!
the third barrel now
Yes!
Alright Sam!
Take it home, boy!
Straight down
to the gate
Come on, boy
faster!
Yes!
the finish line
Our score is..........
2:27
We did it!!!
Perfect score
1st place
goes to us
Sam and me
the perfect team
Let's get that
trophy,Sam.
Author notes
I know this probably isn't much better than Morgan, but I tried to go trough the mind of a professional barrel racer. I wrote it in 5ht hour and was kinda quick so I don't know if it's good enough or not, but I love it. I kinda wanted to start it and make the readers think it was about a wedding and then throw the end in there. I didn't get very far, but I hope ot works.
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300 points, ended February 17, 2007, 6 entries
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Exciting
Very good imagery and emotion! I could feel the race and the inner thoughts of the rider! Great job!
I really like this one!
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Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
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Interesting. I can sense the excitement in your words. good job!
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Thanks. I really appreciate it.
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Yes very nice. I like it alot it does capture the excitment. The only thing is you said your score is 2:27, that confused me because barrel racing isn't scored. aver nice write though and yes I kind of thought it was about a wedding or something.(: thanks for the entry.
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Yeah, I know. I was kinda bored in 2nd hour or 5th hour and I was justtrying to fill a paper. I managed to get both sides of the paper filled. Hahaha
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