As the stars come out
and the melody of the night starts to unfold
it's inconstant, but serenity and sheer harmony
I have awoken to this nectar and from my slumber,
I take flight
Gliding over these sands of time, I feel enchanted by true mysticism
The rhythm of the night inspired me, almost like an impulse in my mind
They chain together all at night in this sheer beauty, breathtaking and astounding
Only in the night, does the magic come alive and true mysticism makes everything shine
Like a good rhythm, it enraptures the soul,
letting you see far more than is truly visible
for creatures not of this world and of an earlier time
The night holds more mystery and secrets,
and that is what enchants us all
We are all bound to magic, in all shapes and forms.
And as the night grows dim, the creatures retreat
They leave for the sanctuary of the shadows
knowing that seeing is believing
and that they are better left alone
Til the next night
Author notes
I hope that everything was done to specifications. I truly enjoyed writing this, it challenged not only my brain, but my creativity. Thank you for the chance to enter.
A contest entry
- Amaze Me! by Shantalina.
550 points, ended February 27, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wonderful
lovely and wonderful..
I love nights and they are beautiful.. serene and placid.. your words describe the night so beautifully that I fell in love with it.. nights and the mystery behind it.. enchants me and my soul.. the title is superbly chosen too.. background relates well too.. but then it can be better ofcourse but that does not matter much you see!! I wish you all the good luck in the contest..
thanks for sharing this
good wishes
-Neha
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Spellbinding...(insert raised eyebrow)The wording was very enchanting, and made me want to read the next line.
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This was marvelous. It gives such a peaceful serene feeling to it, even just reading it. The descriptiveness of sight, sound and emotion make this poem a thing of beauty.
good luck in the contest, I really love this. -
amazing write...
"for creatures not of this world and of an earlier time
the night holds more mystery and secrets."
i wish i could write such intense poetry such as this
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Only one thing needs to be said. Beautiful.
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Bravo Bravo
You did an amazing job on this write. The more I read the more it keep me reading. Wonderfully expressed (Lisa)
"Like a good rhythm, it enraptures the soul,
letting you see far more than is truly visible
for creatures not of this world and of an earlier time
The night holds more mystery and secrets,
and that is what enchants us all
We are all bound to magic, in all shapes and form"
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Very Creative
Indeed this was.
"Like a good rhythm, it enraptures the soul,
letting you see far more than is truly visible"
Amazing Imagery here, and Im sure this will be Appreciated more, if you were to resubmit this in another contest...
It was amazing to me
Ephiphany
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Your message and presentation was interesting and creative. You had nice vivid imagery. Flow and tone was well written. This was a truly effective piece of work. Well done, truly enjoyed reading this.
~Snappy~
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Truly wonderful to read! Extremely captivating- my best read for the week
I'm not sure how you did in the contest, but either way this was a beautiful read!!
Love and peace
halleluja
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I really absolutely Love a Freewrite when it has been oh so written and so very well! you have done a Fine job with this one!!!! Bless you for having such a gifted writing ability!!!! take Care!!!!
*!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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"and the melody of the night starts to unfold"
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Very nice portrait of the night. Beautiful imagery, and it has nice movement to it. Good job
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This has excellent imagery, the only thing I would really change is:
Gliding over these sands of time
That is way too overused. I have seen it too many times to count. -
Imagery is amazing and everything meets requirements...well done! Thanks for entering!
SAE -
I really enjoyed this poem, the immagery is great..the first stanza is my favorite.
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