If you wonder whats wrong
heres the truth, which you don't understand
I'm me, my own person with a life
Always made fun of because I'm me
Why can't you just believe it, its the truth
never an act if thats what you think
if it seems like that is because I'm trying to cheer a person up
Please don't judge the part of me you know
All i ever wanted was someone to talk to
but you know what the wiseman said
Want, Want, Want and never get, Now think
I wait and wait to recieve help back
Half of you may not know but I ask for help
The result is I end up helping you with a problem
I help so you have a clean soul, to return a favor
I'm patiant don't you see I've got problems too
You think you know me the best
Well take the guess, what do I seek?
Singing career, No, True friends
Why do I let people walk over me you say,
To get ready for the pain when high school ends
Just stop with the " You can move in with me" speech
I'll believe you, but its not spoken truely
My life is full of chaos, So I help other to escape
I don't complain much, but it shows any how
Theres no way to hide pain, unless there is major mask
Understand what I go through, why not tell me the truth
Will you be a friend, or leave after high school
Make it honest or forever hurt with a lie
As you read you think but why Danni
Well want to know me then start instead of just sitting
I feel as I try to hard to be a true friend
Well you all win, think of all the things i've done for you
Now switch it, what have you ever done for me........
A contest entry
- Hmmm... by AkaBaki.
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Comments
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very well written one can see the pain and i hope you have a bright future high school is never easy ,i was picked on from 2nd grade until ninth when i stood up for myself hope you will do the same you are a special person as god created all of us god bless you wonderful write -
I really enjoy it!!!
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Well done.
There are a few spelling errors in this (patiant being one I remember). This speaks plainly and loudly with the emotional frustrations that people go through with others(or even one person). At the end of the day, the only person you really have to please is yourself, and if you're content, then...
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Excellent !!
Very touching write.. I do tend to write from my emotions and experiences.. I found this to be just so heartfelt and powerful.. Thank you for sharing this!
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Dear Daniella,
I've always found it difficult to write a poem solely based on my own personal emotions, but you seem to have done this effortlessly, getting an awful lot of hurt and anguish out onto the screen. This in itself is a good skill to have. I've heard writing is an excellent therapy, so continue to pour these feelings out! They certainly flow very well. By reading these words, which you seemed to have directed towards one person in particular, I can tell that you're a very kind hearted person who's had enough of being taken advantage of. Good for you! But don't let that kind heart go to waste. I especially liked the line: "I help so you have a clean soul, to return a favour". Though not as blatant as the rest of the piece, this was the revealing line for me. As far as your writing ability goes, wow, you're 15 years old... it's pretty good! You should nurture it. I hope this piece gets the response it deserves, and I hope you stay strong without losing your kindness. Good luck with your contests.
All the very best,
David. x
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Still a Mystery!
(smiles)
I was hoping for more of a etherial problem to be solved, and yet you give me the complexity of a female - to which the answers shall never be found!
Thanks for your entry!
Tang
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It scared me at first how closely I felt to each sentence, I can relate a lot to all of what you have said in this poem. A very open, brutally honest entry. Thank you for it.
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I like how you made it about you...because you as an individual ....crap I don't know whether to be is or are ..part of this world. A leading part...I don't really understand how it answers the question to it's full extent..but Ido know it answers the question..just not all of the question.
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Very good and very painful. This poem speaks volumes about your pain. Well done a great write with out a doubt. Thanks for putting it in my contest it was a pleasure to read it.
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Hey, great poem. It is strong and has a good flow. Thx 4 entering!
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This poem is amazing.. I do the same thing.. oddly enough sounds like the little speach my brother gave me.. Your poem is so touching your poem has many meaning to me.. Youve done a very good job thanks for the comment
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wonderfully spoken words, i can relate to what you syaing. always giveing and giving and people dont seem to notice your feeligns back. anyways good luck in my contest
take care
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ok im sorry but. im sick of people not fallowing the rules. i didnt read this entry. im sorry. but you didnt fallow the rules. you did not put your option or "angel" in your comment box so i haft to dq it. i hate doing this. i wish people would fallow the rules.
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i like this poem! has a great point to it!
thx for entering my contest with your great poem
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Great work!
I feel the same way. Great work. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Yeah buddy. Keep it up.
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Very nice poem. I enjoyed it very much. It seems like you put a lot of thought into it. Very well written. Keep up the good writes.
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