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As Outcast - Love's Labour Lost

Cuore di pietra
 

 

As some surf sculptured flotsam flung
to shore from stormy sea,
as jetsam leaf on life’s tree hung
from fate’s branch hinge, torn free.

As date, as anniversary,
from calendar expunged,
as sailor smit by siren’s see
in swirling ocean plunged.

As broken toy, forgotten, cast
aside some summer day,
abandoned by spite’s child who fast
found other ploy to play.

 

As voter, duty done, expelled
by politician snide
who cared more for positions held
than bridging deep divide.

As damsel in distress, no knight,
reflecting on love lost,
rejected by some parasite
who’d calculate cash cost.

As bloom precocious whose delight
is pinched by early frost
or stemmed by scissors expedite
in cut glass vase quick tossed.

As endless treason season’s plight
on land none cultivate,
whose soil pollution spoiled despite
a fertile womb to sate.

As rock, protective ice-cap stripped

by rival's global warming,

fresh water drained, soul tainted, whipped,

ripped heart, unheeded warning.

As vintage wine which once was laid

in atmosphere protected,

but thence withdrawn, to be displayed

turned tart, tight tannic wrecked it.

As troubled mind no music may
relieve from woes too great,
find no reprieve when far away
love slips to leave cold grate.


These gifts, false friend, to me you gave
when making tracks elsewhere.
What’s left, what haunts me to the grave ? -
wrong, song distraught, wrung care.

 

 

____

 

Forecast - Love's Labour Found

Wishing you love and light........

Yet tides may turn, storms ride to peace
when filter fresh Fates find,
new Spring brings leaf on life through lease
to leave past grief behind.

Wishing you love and light........

Though idylls fail, all tales too sad
may be rewrit more kind,
a fresh installment good from bad
could conjur – state of mind.

or sleight of hand which line by line
inscribes in polychrome
nuancing black and white decline
from sweetness honeycomb.

Wishing you love and light........

Who once mourned lonely through caprice,
unhappy, undermined
dawn redisovers as tears cease -
ice melts, pain’s chains unwind.

Wishing you love and light........

Oases spring as joys increase
through Time’s new rhyme – the blind
fresh insight find as golden fleece
transmutes mute stone refined.

Wishing you love and light........

These gifts, fair friend, I offer you
for future which could prove
fullfilling, fortunate and true,
fond, fertile – mountains move.

Wishing you love and light........

 

Author notes


contest option 5 newnoakua
contest option 5 YoureNoGoodForMe

broken doll picture
http://flickr.com/photos/shadowplay/110975721/


stone heart picture Gabriella Cinà
http://flickr.com/photos/ladyarwen/2288379922/


broken heart pic
http://flickr.com/photos/8367525@N02/2287390368/

Interstanza broken hearts
http://flickr.com/photos/jenanq8/407755158/

Interstanza Love and Light Catherine Ingram
http://www.flickr.com/photos/cattycamehome/2151669653/

Background
http://flickr.com/photos/badbwoy4lyf/2424815620/

Cast Aside
by Krenna Smart©


A ragged piece of flotsam
Floating on the sea
A bit of paper long discarded
Tumbling in the breeze

An old, forgotten, broken doll
Cast aside one summer day
Abandoned by a tiny child
With other games to play

A lonely creature of the night
Crying for love lost
A pretty flower out of season
Frozen by an early frost

A never ending bitter season
A land too bleak to cultivate
A troubled mind which knows no peace
A heart too hard to break

These gifts, my love, you gave to me
When you traveled on
What’s left are ashes in the wind
And this dreary little song

01/23/2005

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  • Very beautiful and captivating write. I absolutely loved the pictures and the background. Every stanza was so vivid and full of emotion, making this such a powerful piece.

    "As rock, protective ice-cap stripped
    by rival's global warming,
    fresh water drained, soul tainted, whipped,
    ripped heart, unheeded warning."

    Definitely loved those. The rhyming was basically perfect, and the poem flowed well. Thanks for sharing and entering :] <3

  • A beautiful write, the pictures are an excellent accompaniment to the poem. I love the way your poem flows, like the tides of the oceans you speak of.

    Thanks for sharing this,

    Luck.
  • This Was Beautiful
    I really enjoyed reading the write
    And all the pics made it more lively

    Thank for your beautiful piece
    and good luck

  • So attentive in detail and emotion!
    I loved your first stanza of your first piece.

    Thank you for entering.
    The pictures are just stunning too!

    Sophie

    . Rewarded 4


  • nobodys-girl
    April 28

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    oh this is so dark and so good at the same time. i loved the line about the rejected toy from a child. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
  • This was a really good read. I really loved the word choice, and it had a romantic flow to it. My favorite stanzas were 1 and 5. I also really enjoyed the image with this poem. Excellent write, and good luck in my contest.

    XXCrimsonRaineXX

  • Caellach
    April 9

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    Amazing. Simply amazing. The power you poured into these lines is just.... I don't know a word for it!

  • Shassidy
    April 6

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    Great job with this piece! This has really wonderful imagery and rhymes really well. It has such a great flow to it - that was what first caught me. Stanzas 5 and 6 are my favorites because they have such great flow, wording, metaphors, and imagery all combined. The title of this poem reflects it well and it is also not over-used, so great job with that. Overall, this is a really powerful piece. Great job and good luck in the contest!
  • very well expressed and emotional
    i loved the metaphors in this - they clearly displayed the breakup and how you felt and do feel

    a very well written poem
    enjoyed it much

    well done, good luck and thanks for entering

    . Rewarded 4


  • Evremonde
    March 30

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    great

    hey that sounds really good to the ear i especially liked the "politician snide" stanza.. particularly those two words in combination. Nice work with the words. The alternate rhyme pattern worked to good effect. Evr
  • I loved the feeling that this poem's diction gave me. One point of criticism though...I know you went for the end rhymes on all these couplets, but it is just of my opinion that a poem can be just as powerful or even moreso if you take away the rhymes and use a more flowy way of writing. For example, "These gifts, fair friend, to me you gave" sounds unnatural and could have been said, "You gave these gifts to me, fair friend". However, because of the rhyming theme you had to switch around the last few words for it to work. Just my humble opinion, but maybe something to think about. Good job.
  • This is poem is great! I loved it! It exposes so much corruption and the evils of human nature in a really expressive and emtional way. I can see your conviction and the amount of effort you put into this. It flows nicely and the rhythm is great too. You've done a remarkable job, thanks for sharing!

  • Crate and Barrel
    July 8, 2007
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    You've commented the crap out of this site today, congratualtions im actually trying to surpass melodies for that last available spot. no gold membership tho. at this point i dont even know what im saying, but seriously man, good luck with the gold membership. this poem makes me want to route for you over MyDarkness!

  • Sanguinarius gold member
    July 5, 2007
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    Enjoyable read . Great use of words ~Bret~
  • Anno
    July 3, 2007

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    I don't know.

    This poem has a familiar feel to it. I think it could be the opening lines, "flotsam flung", I'm sure I've heard those line before. Not that I'm saying that there is something wrong with what you've written, it is really a well thought out piece. The last stanza is my favourite though, it leaves you in a daze, like the wisps of song lost on a breeze, there, but ever so out of reach. Well done.

    . Rewarded 8


  • suseann
    June 18, 2007
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    Expertise' in poetic verse spills of indigo graces this fine piece.You've cover so many varied versions of the forlorn outcast spirit within this work.Here is high hopes it's only a great written verse and not any feelings haunting you presently. Well done,bravo!

    . Rewarded 6


  • Luna Tique Fringe gold member
    June 16, 2007
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    Nice tight verse, great wordcraft.


  • fool no1
    May 20, 2007
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    Superb!!!!!


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    February 18, 2007

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    Ah, such disspensible indecencies. How easily things of import can be set to side. Who has not? Bless the broken hearts cast aside for something greener.

  • finding serenity
    February 16, 2007

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    Impressive

    Not everyone can get away with this form but you more than do it justice. It all flows together very well. Nice arrangement of words.

  • Need For Redemption
    February 16, 2007
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    Very Nice!

    You have a way with words ( as well as a very large vocabulary lol ).

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