Each time I look in a mirror
I know just what I should see
I am looking at my image
or is my image looking at me.
I'm always a bit disappointed
it never shows me as it should
most of the time I'm fairly well dressed
but it never shows me looking good.
If my image and I could change places
would anyone really know
my reflection and I are exactly the same
so surely nothing could show.
we move together in unison
there is nothing I can hide
my reflection has everything I have
but it's all on the other side.
so whenever I look in a mirror
the image I see looks so real
and I know it will always show how I look
but can never show how I feel.
A contest entry
- What to choose… What to choose… (Points will increase up to 2,000 depending on the amount of enters come have a look) by AngelDreamer.
610 points, ended May 31, 2007, 19 entries
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This is true you're reflection is only the image that you see. It can't show emotions. It's just mirroring them back. It does have everything you have all BUT emotions. So your relfection isn't all that you are. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
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This was a very enjoyable read. I really like the message you are puting out. The things you brought to light here are so very true. You portrayed your thoughts quite well. Also, I enjoyed the rhyme scheme you have used, it really helped with the flow of this piece.
All and all a very good read.
I can see why this piece won an honorable trophy. Thank you so much for enering my contest and I wish you the best of luck.
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This is a realy good written piece I like Rhyming poetry. Thank you for your entry and Good Luck in the Contest.
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judging
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So true, the mirror can't reveal our feelings. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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A really excellent poem with great rhyme and rhythm. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.
David
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I like this. You and your mirror image.
Lady Dragonwyck
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I love this, I seem to be able to relate to this piece. I mean It is eye candy to any kind of reader. d
"If my image and I could change places
would anyone really know
my reflection and I are exactly the same
so surely nothing could show."
"so whenever I look in a mirror
the image I see looks so real
and I know it will always show how I look
but can never show how I feel."
These are my favorite two parts, i think that you really accomplished your goal. -
Thats very true...a mirror will never show how you feel, only how you look. But it doesn't matter how you look, for the emotions far out weigh anything the mirror can show.
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i understood and cud relate to this poem so much! ur beautiful, like each and every other human being! nice job!
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Wow
This was an excellent poem, and brings up a good question too.
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terrific
Awesom i love this poem it was wonderfully written, and i know how the person(or you) in this poem feels after all i do the same things most of the time as does everyone at some point. Again Amazingly wonderful poem
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This poem is beyond excellent. I loved every line. And I know exactly what you mean in this poem. I, and I'm sure many others, can relate almost too well. Your flow and rhymes were just above and beyond what most people write. Great job!
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great poem the 2nd stanza doesent quite "roll off the tounge" but it has amazing depth and great wording thanks for entering and good luck
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Very creative! This has excellent rhythm and flow. My only critique is that I think it could benefit from a bit of a punctuation polish. Other than that, this is a fantastic write.
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Amazing. I really liked this.
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this is written well. thank you for sharing this with me. i like the mirror now after days, weeks and months of trying to. thank you for reminding me where i was and good luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarien
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An excellent rhyme and rhythm makes this a pleasure to read. I like the concept behind this.
Very well written
Barkeeper! a drink for my friend
Raker
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This is a wonderful piece! The flow was amazing and the rhyming was just brilliant! Amazing lines too! I loved reading this. Every stanza was my favorite.
I especcially liked the way you wrapped up this piece- back to looking at the mirror! Nice work! I really enjoyed reading this fantastic piece!
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Very true. I have a hard time with mirrors. They are always interesting to write about. One simple thing and there are a million different things to say or write about. It's such a great topic. You did wonderfully with this. Of all the mirror poems I've read, this is one of the best. I could completely relate. Great job.
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How true and deeply touching.
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sorry that wasnt much of a comment but i was in a rush and didnt want to not leave a comment ya know? anyway i like the idea if this poem the idea of hiding what u really feel but thats not always a good thing you know sometimes u gotta talk to people bout whats goin on inside otherwise it just tears you up xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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wow! greatx
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loved this, it was thoughtful and deep
nice job
my fav lines were:
"I am looking at my image
or is my image looking at me."
take care
M~
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This is very deep and expressive. I love how each piece flowed so well together. The feeling of not liking what one sees in the mirror is oh too familar and sad. I use to feel this way, but have grown to understand the saying "Beauty is within". I have learned not to care what people think of me and have learned to love myself and accept that I am what I am and I was built the way my God intended me to look and altering that would only disgrace his wisdom and work of art. Appearance is only something that the eyes can see. If everyone could see the world through closed eyes they would understand a whole new outlook on the world and understand that people have more to offer than their appearance. Close your eyes and look around and listen, what do you see? nothing. Now, what do you hear? You hear the birds singing and the wind blowing, when people talk you hear their words and am able to gain a true perception of who that person really is. People are all too much judged by their appearance instead of what is actually important...their heart...My children are quite shorter than a lot of the other kids in their class and they often tell me that kids pick on them for their size and they get upset. I ask them what is so important about that person that they are good enough to earn your tears and they say that there is nothing special about them, I then tell them to dry their tears because as the say goes "The ones that make you cry are not worth your tears and the ones that are worth your tears would not make you cry" I tell them that as long as they believe in themselves then they can and will accomplish anything, it doesn't matter what you look like, but as long as they perceive themselves in a negative way then they will be held back from the great things in life. Being "beautiful" is only an opinion. Everybodys opinions are different, what I may think is attractive another may not, so whose right and whose wrong? They both are, because it is a truth only to themselves not to the whole world. I once dated a man that most told me that he was "ugly" and couldn't understand why I was dating him because he had crossed eyes. I could never understand what they were talking about, because whenever I looked at him, I only seen him and not his eyes. I seen his heart and his soul and who he was. His eyes did not make him the man he was, his heart did. I have not seen him in many years, but to this day when I picture him in my head, I do not see "crossed eyes", I see a wonderful man with a good heart.
Believe in yourself and who you are...inside, and only good can come your way
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this is the best poem I've read about a mirror, such wonderful wording, and so very true..
the rhyming and flow is great too..
well done!!
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um amen
wow. great wording and imagery. i loved this and it means more than what one would think i guess. oh screw it i dont know wat im saying. good job
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The idea behind this poem was very interesting. I've never thought about my reflection in the way you explored it in the poem. I do have a suggestion to make, though. You use little punctuation in this, and I think it would be a good idea to use a bit more. Not a whole lot, but more than you do. There are entire stanzas that don't have punctuation at all. What I would suggest is reading through your poem out loud and seeing where you would naturally pause. At those places, I'd put a punctuation mark of some kind, unless there's a special reason that you wouldn't pause there. It's just a suggestion, so don't feel like you have to use it. This was a good write. Keep at it.
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interesting
wow, i really like this poem. the style of writing reminds me of myself, actually. that might sound vain, but its not intended that way, i just really liked your poem. the honesty of it. -
wonderful Norman, as always you have created something simple yet deep.
well written
ang
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This is without a doubt, the most enjoyable poem of yours that I've ever read. So accurate, personal and thought provoking. The rhyme of course is spot-on. I know my mirror and I argue a lot. This is great!
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