Did I just hear "nevermore"?
Looking out the window,
I see a black harbinger of death,
upon a winter's tree.
There is no sun today,
as if it knew that death was coming.
Hiding it's saving light,
from the one in dire need of it.
I stepped away from the window,
and closed the curtains on my fear.
Sprinted to the closet dark,
and slammed the door behind me.
I remind myself it's safer here,
and so I stay evermore.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration.. by MaaiL.
300 points, ended February 16, 2007, 18 entries
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Dark but captivating. Excellent use of words with a great flow. Great ending "I remind myself it's safer here,
and so I stay evermore."
Keep up the great writing and best of luck in the contest. =)
And thank you for your kind words on my poem.
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Woah this poem really gets to me.. its so amazing. It has such strong imagery.. i can picture what you're describing perfectly. great poem.
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This has an Edgar Allan Poe quality of gloom fitting the title, a good write to express this mood and movement. Reminds me of something said by Anais Nin, that 'Withdrawal is a preparation for death.' I think life is essentially an outdoor thing, death is an indoor thing. Good response to the raven in winter, sitting in a tree in cold fog...
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Great stuff. It's a little hard to read with the back ground so I had to read over it more then once. What I find with a lot of people that they wont take the time to comment if they can get it the first time. But wonderful write.
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Good.. I liked it!
Thanks for your entry.. and Best of Luck in the contest..! 
**$h@Mz**
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