O dear Lord, I ask you for your help
As I settle me down to sleep
Please keep me from Satan's power
As I journey down in the deep.
I kneel beside my bunk tonight
And beg you to hear my plea
Don't let my submarine sink tonight
Or founder under the green sea.
Give me strength to do my jobs
And help me to be brave
So I can return safe home to land
And not have a watery grave.
In a list
A contest entry
- The Wages of Sin Are DEATH - a contest for TRUE religious zealots! by Mad Pastor Grovell.
375 points, ended August 4, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Winklings # 168 ~ For members and Allpoetry ~ Free Verse anyone? by Lyndon.
1750 points, ended March 30, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A prayer poem that rhymes.
I admire it but it is not, of course, free verse. Sorry.
Lyndon. -
The last stanza is a scorcher.
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I love that line about doing your jobs on the boat. But there is no enough about how SEX-SINNERS on board the vessel will perish at God's hand 200 metres below sea level on the way to HELL.
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Wonderful. I could actully hear a sailor on a ship praying this. I've noticed you're into rhyming. It is very good, I hope the piece I submitted to your contest works for you. When I'm bitterly shaken by a piece, all rhyming tends to go out the window, if you know what I mean. Very nice piece here, are you a lover of the sea? or did you just choose this for a contest?
~Chelsey~
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a very beautiful prayer-poem filled with devotion and faith ... I loved the imagery and rhymes ... I would say that it is more a prayer of "demand", asking for protection and help, than one of gratitude, but I enjoyed it just as much ... after all, we turn to those whose presence we are grateful for, so this would make it a poem of indirect gratitude ...
thank you so much for sharing your heart with us,
all the best,
maa
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Thanks for entering!
this makes me think of my Husband. He will be deploying on a ship. I think you have a small typo in the third line, second stanza. did you mean "my"?
great write and good luck int he contest. -
The Lord will give you strenght. Praise God this is beautiful. You have written it so beautifully. Keep penning for God. God bless you and love you.
In christ Jesus,
Tabitha -
I think the imagery was all there - I could see the sailor by his bunk praying. You did a good job here
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Touching.....powerful.....amazing.....great write.
I loved it from begining to end. Well done, well said.
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