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Blooming In The Shadows



Sometimes I feel
that fate tempts me;
toys with my poetic mind
attempting to wilt my roses;
to rob me of my Spring fantasies.

Perhaps my dew-filled dreams
melt the ice
from your Winter symphony
and sweetness clings to strings
of your bleeding violin.

When darkness comes,
I shun the shadows
afraid that love will leave
and reality shatter my rainbow's end.

I visit you from a distance
enamored at the sight
of streaming emotion,
in beautiful whispers
filling my pores,
bumps rising on my skin,


but I never step close enough
to lose my breath.


Author notes

This was first written to express my perception of black and white when it comes to poetry...
that is what came to mind, and dedicated to one of my favorite poets on his birthday

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  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    November 14, 2007

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    I'm sure I've read this before and on reading it again, I'm just as impressed as when I first read it. Thank you for entering this and good luck in the judging. Laura x


  • Fug-azi
    February 26, 2007

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    A Reply To Your Dedication

    Lose Your Breath

    In these shadows
    I see hesitation upon your footfalls

    I know you wonder,
    will the darkness wilt those flowers
    of romance you cultivate,
    Bring autumn to your sunshine fantasies.

    I have felt the tears
    Upon my winter and their melody
    melts my icy words, even as you
    hold acceptances breath.

    In these damned dreams,
    your hopes are always present,
    enough only to nourish the void
    within my heart.

    I keep wishes tightly chained,
    for I would not see you
    lose your breath,

    and yet,

    I wonder,
    If you inhale this essence
    that captures my soul,
    see the darkness in all its glory
    would you return to the light.

    ~~~~~~~~~~

    Just my way to say thank you for this beautiful poem, and in some ways a response .. I hope you understand.


  • Forgotten truth
    February 17, 2007

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    loved it .. as a was walking along this write in my mind,,its was like a dream,, i feelt alittle hope,, like to a fight you feel you are losen,, and then i realise the fight was a person,,, that person,,the one we keep watching ,,, but keep talinking our selfs not to speak up,, or dare ot say the words that could change our lifes forever


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    February 16, 2007

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    Incredible

    This is a very beautifully penned poem and its full of complexion and e-motions in a way. I cans ee why this is a winner and why you won silver with this very lovly poem. It is poetry like this that many people write here in all poetry that inspires us all to post a little something to this magnitude. excellent poem as always and congrats on silver. Sincerely, Paul


  • Starswhispers silver member
    February 15, 2007
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    This a very good poem I like the expression you use bringing very powerful imagery, a very nice word choice, I love the 4th stanza. A strong write and a joy to read. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • kaibab silver member
    February 15, 2007
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    So wonderful that you are an angel of lkight...and even in comparing black and white you make me glad we are on the same seach for feather to bring out the joy...so well written this poem is...and touches me in a deeper space...


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    February 15, 2007

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    Oh my, what an awesome write, sweet girl! You've created a wonderful dedication to your friend that just is breath taking! Love this!
    All the best to you in the contest!


  • StarEyes
    February 15, 2007

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    Lynda,

    This is just fantastic!! Something sooo magical in these words!!What a great write this is!!!Keep that pen flowing!! Best of luck in the contest!


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    February 15, 2007

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    Excellent

    Lynda this truely is Brilliant and a fantastic dedication. Your talent as a writer just seems to grow with every poem that i see of yours now days. Wishing you all the very best of luck in this contest my dear sweet Sis. Brian.


  • troyias
    February 15, 2007

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    Beautiful Write

    Well done, beautiful flow and full of lovely emotion. Well written.

    *Go with God* my child,

    Mom


  • looneyeclipse
    February 15, 2007

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    A beautiful dedication poem Lynda. I recall helping you judge a contest, in which he entered, and subsequently blew away the field, so I can fully appreciate why you'd want to dedicate a poem to him, in recognition of his poetic talent.

    Still though, I kept getting the sensation that complex thoughts were pulling you in different directions, as you wrote this poetic masterpiece. I found it amazing that it didn't detract from the quality of your writing, the poem was beautiful, as always.


  • Fug-azi
    February 15, 2007
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    Oh Lynda, you have dipped your talent into the grey between light and dark producing a wonderfully written piece here. Your imagery is just so .. so... so good.
    You have taken what was asked from the contest and created near perfection. It would be a crime if this were to go unrecognised.

    I doff my cap and bow to your talent.

    (I thank you for dedicating this to me and, yes, I understand.)


  • Angel With No Halo
    February 15, 2007

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    This was actually a breathtaking write sweety. I just love the way you write. Ya know what is sad.. when Jeremy and I would judge our contests.. we could tell just which one was yours without cheating. That just goes to show what a unique style you have,that I adore and envy!! You are a gem.. and I love THIS write as always!! Good luck in your contest dear!!
    Love,
    ~Krys~

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