I am not feeling myself today.
I am living inside a black padded cell
the walls are falling in on me,
crushing me to me knees
the sweat is sticking in my creases.
So this is what it feels like to die.
I must get out of this head
I should become somebody else,
escape and get to the 'out',
I am a thousand year old twenty-one year old.
Something is not right today.
Clinging to the text 'I love you'
it never comes
and when it does it doesn't make me well.
I must run away in my pyjamas and dressing gown,
and feel the freezing wind cool the sweat on my face
open my arms and let it carry me away forever,
let it make me someone else.
Today I am not ok,
but tomorrow I guess I will be 'me' again.
But now, I am screaming from the fire inside my head,
the panic is all I feel.
A contest entry
- IV Prewrites! by Lj-.
345 points, ended February 18, 2007, 38 entries
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I believe that so many people will be able to relate to the complex emotions you have described here in this wonderful poem. This write is very thought provoking, and most of us, at one time or another, have wanted to be someone else for awhile, to avoid the pain and heartbreak that life can sometimes bring our way. A very well written piece. Blessings, Patty
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i like your poem so much emotion!!!! this is really good, be proud and keep on writing ther is much talent here... i enjoyed it alot, your grammer seemed good and its all over well looked over which i thank you for...
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nice....
i like your poem.... it has a good feeling in it....
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Well done
This poem really struck a chord with me.
My darling wife, Sasha, is in hospital, has been for a week now, deep in the depths of despair. She feels that life is not worth living and as yet cannot see a way out of the hole she feels she is in.
Yet there is a way out and I know that with God's help, the doctor's and nurses help, and my undying love for her, will help her out of it.
As I said, this poem really struck a chord with me.
The imagery in here is very vivid, the metre is great and the choice of words are perfect for the tone of the poem.
A great write.
Thank you!
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Wow... i mean i love it., it's well written.. But in my case this feels like everyday. when am trying to be optimistic but i cant help it .. especially like in the verse : Clinging to the text 'I love you'
it never comes
and when it does it doesn't make me well. because it's so true... Everytime that something gets well another disturbes the flow -
love the poem
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This is a very good poem you penned here dear poet, well done good luck in my contest
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Very well done. I like the details.
Thank you for your entry,
Best of luck!
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wow that is so amazing what an inspiration great
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wow
sometimes i feel the exact same way. every once in a while i get stuck in this slum when i feel i just can't get out, like if i don't i'm gonna burst and do something irrational, your poem is very relative to me. good write.
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Thank you, its always nice to know that I'm not alone, peace and best wishes to you.
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nice job with this one
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Thank you!
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