What reflection is yours?
Just an uncool loser
with nobody to love.
Smash this disgusting thing
that stares back in disgust,
and kill what you once were.
Stomp upon the pieces
and break them to slivers,
for nothing it has shown
or will ever reveal
is good enough for them.
Once you are left with dust,
try to find who you are.
No mirror will ever
dare show your soul again.
A contest entry
- Anything and Everything by Welcome-To-Hell.
700 points, ended February 16, 2007, 58 entries
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Mirrors...amazing what we can see..good, bad, ugly....good job and good luck...vivid imagery and emotion....
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True very true. Yet truley no one is really a loser it's only what you put for your self worth. Very vivid poem. I liked it alot.
A Murderous Lament -
A very interesting write. The message I recieve is a good one. Well done. Keep them coming and blessed be.
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Very powerful and intense, I like it.
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interesting. the last two lines leave the mind wondering. it seems like it would almost be more appropriate to say "Dare no mirror to ever/show your soul again"
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This seems to be one that says that what you once were you no longer will be that you will look in that mirror and be someone else. Great write. Good luck with the contest and Thank you for sharing this with us it was very good.
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wow amazing poem... how it makes the heart bleed... This is such a dramatic poem. Vivied imagery and strong emotions makes this poem stand out. A real attention grabber that makes one stop and think. Well done dear poet. Well written indeed! I very much like the way that you wrote it the way it portrays life. It's very well structured; most people, (including me) can't break poetry up very well. I guess it depends on mood, for me. You have considerable talent at putting deep emotion into words.
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This is an awesome poem with beautiful language! I love the idea of self-concept, great write!
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This is a very interesting write well penned best of luck in the contest
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this poem states your thoughts and feelings with power. I can envision you sitting in front of a mirror thinking or speaking aloud. Very credibly written. A very nice job! Good luck in the contest.
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good
Good emontion. Well written -
the mirror cracked and shattered into a million pieces do we ever like what we see in ourself when we look at that reflection ... probably not an for 'them we learn to live without their opinion move on stand talk again and walk our own path.....but if we fall and give up dead is dead no matter what. Nicely penned good imagery and the thoughts it provokes giving much to ponder. Thank you for the pleasure of the read...good luck in the contest
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