A stripper way back from years ago
Still doesn’t know how to let the past go
Flaunting it now for all to see
With hairy legs for you and me
Sunbathing on the seashore
Not believing that less is more
Toes and lips are painted red
She’s better off to hide in bed
Those boobs no longer defy gravity
When she opens her mouth it’s full of cavities
Knobby knees and huge wide ass
Wondering why no-one makes a pass
Hair styled like many years ago
Thinks it’s so her age don’t show
There’s always a hero in every crowd
He goes and covers her, with a shroud
In a list
A contest entry
- MAKE LOVE TO ME by esroddo.
450 points, ended May 7, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Nothing Boring by cali951.
500 points, ended December 3, 2007, 104 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this was kind of funny so what made you write it?...good luck in my contest
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Cute..
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LOLLLL
this is really hilarious! sickening image, but great! l0lll great write and best of luck to ya!
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LOL....so funny this one is.. Although this is funny, I have seen women like this who cannot let it go. Good luck in the contest.
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wow yeah that like made me sick! it was sooooooooooooooo funny! the background was just ewwww yeah! I really liked it though it was sooo funny and a little disgusting! anyway excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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OMG....I think I may have to puke from the visualizations of this...lol. Just kidding...you have done a remarkable job with this..it is funny and has very good imagery.
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Well that is worthy of pissing myself laughing just from the pic alone. Shame, seen too many of "those" around town, doughing. But definitely TFF. Nice work.
Thanks for entering and good luck
Storm -
i give 3 jsut for the picture alone
okay before i ead i have to start out with props on the pictur lol!!!
the peom was very good too... really funny actually excelent job. its not really erotic and im not turned on but hey i think yuo are finalist worthy.
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Love the humor. I will have to say my grandmother would have had a fit to see some old lady trying to pull this off. This really made me think of times she just could not believe someone or something she was seeing, that was not like it was back in her day! Thank you very much for the laugh, and good luck in the contest
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hahaha
great one, as always (^^)
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slipperssun
Oh my goodness !!
This is simply F A B U L O U S !!!!!!!!
What a classic write; this should be published somewhere
I wish you the absolute best of luck in this contest
Stay safe
Keep that sense of humour strong darlin
~Amanda
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PLEASE! just tell me nicely when I am better off hiding in bed! I dont want others to think me, "an Icon gone dead!" rofl... and if you need to send me a Hero just make sure its one I can take to that bed you're hiding me in!!! lmfao...
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Good stuff. I don't think it's funny or cute but full of words that tells the truth. It's sad to me even a little. There are so many who really are living in this poem. Well said.
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This is funny as hell It made me laugh pretty hard wonderfully penned you've done an excellent job Bravo
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Cute.. Very cute indeed. I really enjoyed the rhyme and that pooor olllllllle woman. hehehe thank goodness for a the hero coming around Excellent poem... Kassie. -
Funny....
It's difficult to get old when you don’t want to. There is something so very unattractive about not acting ones age… old acting young and young acting old…
I want you to know however your write will not stop me from riding my skateboard this week-end. I will remove my hair piece thought.
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So awesome =P And I really know what kind of people you're talking about -thank god I don't see them very often. I just don't get the second sentence in your last stanza... I think perhaps inserting a comma somewhere would clarify a lot. Cool picture, by the way =P
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LMAO....
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This is abso freakin lutely HILARIOUS....
and the picture???
Oh laaaaaaaaawd....
I am crying I'm laughing so hard...
I'm definitely a fan
xoxo
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I don't know what made me laugh harde, the picture of this humorous sad tale of one being a legend in her own mind
the Satyr
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GREAT HUMOR
Wow this is great love the humor in this write. I had to read it twice just to compose my self. I still have a smile on my face. Thank you for entering and good luck (Lisa)
"Those boobs no longer defy gravity
When she opens her mouth it’s full of cavities
Knobby knees and huge wide ass
Wondering why no-one makes a pass"
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Great poem excellent humour, but ughh that picture lol
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I take it you know one. Ha! Ha! Great poem and kind of funny, especially the last two lines.
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you know i think my penis just went inside my body and refused to come out, it could be the pic, or the fact that i got that image in my head, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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LMAO!!!!!
Oh good golly! Thatis so hilarious! Again, you amaze with your humor! I love what you've done here! Gosh, you've got to stop this or you'll kill me by laughing so hard! Good golly! I so need some air before I keel over!
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