Blades held steady,
Shields ready,
Fiery eyes,
Seek foes demise,
Mages whisper,
Spells to blister,
Staves raised high,
Lightning fly,
Morals falter,
Tactics to alter,
Generals who play
Soldiers pay
Fates icy hand,
Destinies command,
General’s cry,
Charge to die,
Author notes
This was made using a new form I created, if your interested in the details tell me and ill email them to you. I will also post the on the forum of the inkwell which is one of the groups im in.
thanks for reading my poem.
emeraldsoldier
oh this is option (2)
A contest entry
- Fantasy Contest! by Catauthor.
600 points, ended February 28, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme Time by Kevan.
390 points, ended March 3, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Time to do Battle! by IndividualEleven.
900 points, ended March 28, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I loved the last stanza on this, this is really cool good job.
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thanking you
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This is cool. I love fantsay battles and the imagry is great. Keep it up
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thank you, much appreciated
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I wont be able to add on to finalist list due to not meeting the 20 line min, however if you want to add to it, just IM and let me know, so I could consider it. I have to be fair and uphold the rules of my own contest.
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Nice write, loved the lines length and the rhyme used, great imagery as well, what was the option you chose by the way, any how great write and thanks for entering, oh and loved this part
Fates icy hand,
Destinies command,
General’s cry,
Charge to die,
great ending! - Jacen an IndividualEleven. -
Interesting form, similar to one I have been experimenting with recently. It allows to express a lot, which is exactly what you did with this poem. I feels like the final battle of the last war to be waged in this world. I feel the time in which it will take place is not far from now. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
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Great job and thanks again for the wonderful entry in my contest. I'll be looking into your style on this for sure. Great job!
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wow thanks so much
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Great poem, I read it before!
But this time I loved it even more!
Great entry, thats what this is!
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wow great thanks, thats awesome
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Very interesting! This short form has great impact! I can imagine it isn't easy to be able to grasp a great rhythm using just a few syllables per line. This is very impressive. I hope you share the form with our group, maybe we could all give it a try!
~Lori
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thanks, oh and i already have i strated a thread on the forum.
emeraldsoldier
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Great poem. Good imagery, flow and rhyme. I love the short form.
You seem to have a knack for medieval themes, which I also like, as I read a lot of fantasy novels, many involving knights and such.
I'll have to check out your forum post. I like that style.
Good luck in the contest.
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thanks very much gald you liked it. and it's good to here of a fellow fantasy reader.
emeraldsoldier
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Very good form... great imagery, rhyme, and word choice. Great poem! Thanks for your entry; good luck!
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thanks
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Wow, this is a very cool poem! I love the imagery. I'd like to know about your form sometime, when the contest is over. Thank you for the entry!
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thanks very much
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Certainly an interesting new style and I like the subject matter as well. I've noticed there is a desided lack of good epic poetry on this site which seems odd considering the origin of all poetry lies in things like Homer and Beowulf. I applaud anyone brave enough to venture into those waters as it can be a difficult subject to write. By the way did you mean to put "Staves"?
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hahah, yes i did indeed mean to put staves thanks for pointing that out and your right there is lack of epic poetry, ill try and fix that.
emeraldsoldier
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Wow, I really do like this form. You really captured the feelings in this poem and, like usual, your rhymes are perfect. Great work!
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thanks very much for your ever encourage comments.
emeraldsoldier
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Wow. The short lines really give you the feeling of fast-action battle. Words like 'fly' were especially effective too. This is a fantastic poem. Good luck in the contest fellow Avalonian. Meggh xxxxxxxxxxxx
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