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Solitude

Sometimes I wonder
If I could live in bliss
By myself on an island,
Is there anyone I would miss?
Would anyone notice
My social neglect,
As I labored on the barrier
My calloused heart would erect?
Could I live the my life
In this isolated way?
With a tremendous sign
Reading, “Please stay away.”

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  • And Hyetal
    December 27, 2007

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    I love the connection between title and poem. This was short, sweet, and to the point. The whole thing flowed and the rhyming wasn't forced. Great entry.

    Thank you so much for entering my contest.

    Always,
    Cassie


  • Venusbabi
    June 15, 2007
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    that was pretty. good job and good luck


  • Delete this polease
    June 9, 2007

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    A short poem filled with so much. I was just like that but sometimes you have to flip over that sign to the one that says "ask me whats wrong...then force me to tell you" Good luck and thanks for entering


  • littlegirlapril
    April 19, 2007

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    Short and magnifiecent.
    I'm sorry you've been lied too so much.
    Well, Thank you and Good Luck in my Contest. :]
    [[ZombiNa]] ♥


  • Zanark
    March 8, 2007
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    Instant finalist


  • ThunderCatWonder08
    March 8, 2007
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    good

    this is very isolating makes it sad


  • trynfinity
    February 22, 2007
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    Sad and lonely. I don't think any of us could truly live isolated completely from any outside personal interaction even if it's only the mail man bringing junk mail that means nothing. We use others to validate ourselves, and the purpose of our existance. good luck in the contest.


  • Justified Inc.
    February 16, 2007

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    Admonishing

    I really felt the impact of this one! Lovely flow and great message. I myself, have been way up in the mountains for a little over a year now, so I could so relate to this one! But as you say,

    "would anyone notice
    my social neglect?"

    I suppose I have noticed it more then anything the last few months, ha ha, called Cabin Fever!
    Loved the poem!
    Castaway


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      On, solitude

      Thanks again, I'm glad you enjoyed it. This poem is based on how I felt after my first wife left me a number of years ago, I was feeling a little anti-social.


  • Pulp Addiction
    February 15, 2007

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    this is reallly good

    how you prtray your isolation
    there are so many levels this could be looked at...

    how you keep people away, then again why is it they stay away? although you feel stuk on his island, do you really know if the people outside are looking for a way in??

    amazing, ifi had clapps id give them to you so

    *claps frantiallY* ^.^


  • Princessdove
    February 15, 2007
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    Great job with depicting a good question about living alone, isolated. We are social creatures. I like how your poem made me think because thats one of my favorite kinds of poems. Keep up the good work.

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