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Replayed

 



Verbal switch -

weapon of choice,

snapped

from Webster's tree

 

Whipped

by volatile vocabulary -

lashes

of welted insults

scar emotional carcass

 

Mental defenses

override -

automatic shutdown;

shield of deflection created,

self preservation a must

 

Cerebral camcorder

set to loop;

yesteryear,

replayed

in black and white

 

Trapped

in a mesmerized paralysis

of worthlessness;

devoured

by a shameful puddle -

neck deep

in loathsome quicksand



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  • requiempoet gold member
    February 26, 2007

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    I'm amazed at your word choice, the first stanza had me wowed and hoping that this poem would go on and on and on and on...sort of like how this comment is going to be. I'm always amazed at how peoples poetry can be different you use all of these remarkable words to make a remarkable poem. This has a bit of a sting to it, but it's to the point. It sort of says, " don' fuck with me"


  • Tangled Angle
    February 15, 2007

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    Don't let them haters bring you down, because I love you! lol

    This was creative, and I liked the concept. What made this 10 times better is that I could feel it, which is what a lot of amazing writers on here have been lacking lately- emotion. Glad to see you're one of the ones that still have it.


  • Sokarjo
    February 14, 2007
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    Wow... that is amazing... powerful, so full of vivid words... superb write, Celtic!


  • Blazing White Wolf
    February 14, 2007
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