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For It Is Home

For It Is Home

 

 

 

It was possibly the only place
that I could not leave,
not always so bleak
and desolate.

 

 

 

With no life left in her,
she stands alone
amongst the hills
and valleys,
wasting away
as tumbleweeds cross
before her.

 

 

 

Once she was alive
with the hustle and bustle
of the children playing,
women laughing
like cackling hens,
and men who jabbered,
cussing about crops and wives
and spit tobacco juice
most often missing the spittoon.

 

 

 

She was the first building,
the town hall
and where they held church,
school and once, the Clarkdale News.

 

 

 

But it was too isolated,
and the people started leaving
until there was only me left,
and this old building
that held oh, so many memories
for me to ever go away from her.

 

 

 

So, here we are,
me and her,
left to our hauntings,
so many decades
that became much more

than a century,
and neither of us
will ever leave,
for it is home.

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  • hoodoolover silver member
    February 21, 2007

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    Love it! You have painted such a crisp clear picture with your words, totally believable, especially the spitting of the tobacco, lol! Very well done, thanks for entering


  • Jersene gold member
    February 21, 2007

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    Nice little snippet of a ghost town...fits the picture well...and yes, home never leaves our hearts. Memories always dominate over the skeletons of what's left behind. Nice penning!


  • timothyward
    February 20, 2007
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    good job

    I liked this poem very much. It fit the picture and full of imagery. Much success in the contest!

  • OurxBeginning
    February 20, 2007

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    This is really good, a lot of imagery is in this. I liked how you made it come to life in my mind. Well done, mom!

  • jesseramsey
    February 20, 2007
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    very good

    I like the imagery. It was well thought out and written. I enjoyed it.


  • Kari gold member
    February 17, 2007

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    Oh wow very well done. I could picture everything in my mind. The best of luck to you in the contest.

    Kari


  • leo2
    February 16, 2007

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    This is the feeling I get when I visit my grandparents old home place. Now it is vine covered, ramshackled, decrepid log cabin but back then it was home. Thanks for the memories and good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • pattyann4500
      February 16, 2007
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      Leo, my friend, I'm so glad to see you back. Thank you for your comment.

      Yes, I suppose we all try to go home. The last time I was home, it was much like yours. It was overgrown and boarded up with a padlock on the door and a "no tresspassing" sign on the porch post. At one point I felt that the house just died.

      Welcome back, Leo. Hugs, Patricia


  • owlishhunter
    February 15, 2007

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    Another masterful write, my friend! I love where this took me, and I agree...perhaps we should all visit that place within us from time to time...Bravo, and good luck!!

    • pattyann4500
      February 16, 2007
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      Thank you so much, Krys. I decided years ago that there are places that I should go to at times and places I don't dare visit again. I so appreciate your comment. Hugs, Patricia


  • cherche -d -ame
    February 15, 2007

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    I do believe we all have a Clarkdale somewhere deep inside us...and it is the place of refuge we find, unfortunately we venture there far too few timesBest wishes in the contest sweetie and much love of course
    xoxoxoxo
    reenie

    • pattyann4500
      February 15, 2007
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      Thanks, Reenie. Yes, I sometimes go there. It's hard to tell if I'm there or not lately. Sometimes oblivion is the only place I belong. Love and hugs, Patricia


  • My Darkness
    February 14, 2007

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    beautiful.. =) as always, your words just take me away.. they really make me feel warm inside.. i hope one day i find my home


  • Truthful Princess
    February 14, 2007
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    breathtaking

    Great write mom..and happy valentines day!


  • jjbreunig3
    February 14, 2007

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    An interesting interpretation...

    An interesting interpretation; it is surprising how a photograph can spur on our imagination; liked the direction this piece took me; well done. -Joe

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