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All-One-Ness (Metered Mirror-Rhyme)



When lonely heart was crying for relief
For grief became an uninvited guest
Who shattered every well-installed belief
And filled my heart with anger and unrest

Such sadness had invaded inner space
For all my life I’ve hidden from pain’s claw
With empty smile upon my joyless face
I tried to mask the ugliness I saw

Within myself, projected on each thing
When truth could not be seen before my eyes
My soul could not take flight on broken wing
A mask of pleasure would my fear disguise

Until the day I longed to see the sky
Dark clouds would come and go, but never stay
Like seasons’ changing faces passing by
Impermanence - the law they would obey

All things, once born, must soon return to dust
No matter if their name is grief or joy
In sunshine after thunder we may trust
Immortal Self no weapon can destroy

The body will one day return to naught
Like mind, emotions, sorrows, bliss and fame
Identified no more with name and thought
All-One-ness with my Inner Self I claim

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All-One-ness with my Inner Self I claim
Identified no more with name and thought
Like mind, emotions, sorrows, bliss and fame
The body will one day return to naught

Immortal Self no weapon can destroy
In sunshine after thunder we may trust
No matter if their name is grief or joy
All things, once born, must soon return to dust

Impermanence - the law they would obey
Like seasons’ changing faces passing by
Dark clouds would come and go, but never stay
Until the day I longed to see the sky

A mask of pleasure would my fear disguise
My soul could not take flight on broken wing
When truth could not be seen before my eyes
Within myself, projected on each thing

I tried to mask the ugliness I saw
With empty smile upon my joyless face
For all my life I’ve hidden from pain’s claw
Such sadness had invaded inner space

And filled my heart with anger and unrest
Who shattered every well-installed belief
For grief became an uninvited guest
When lonely heart was crying for relief



Author notes

this poem won a GOLD TROPHY in intanglio2ring's contest :
"new word or mystery of life" http://allpoetry.com/contest/2340562

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this poem won a BRONZE TROPHY in soccer-freak-tyler's contest :
"for my homies #4" http://allpoetry.com/contest/2339630

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METERED MIRROR-RHYME in iambic pentameter - with an abab cdcd rhyme-scheme
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Comments

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  • snehaprava dash
    April 20, 2007
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    superb.i like each and every line

  • intanglio2ring
    February 24, 2007

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    Excellent!

    Style, grace, certainly a beauty!
    Loved the form and spirituality truly an enlightened piece (peace)!
    I think this will be my winner!
    Tang


    • maa gold member
      March 5, 2007
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      thank you so much for the most appreciated gold trophy, dear tangy ... it means a lot to me and I am happy that you enjoyed my poem ...
      all the best,

      marion

  • Tangled Angle
    February 15, 2007
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    One of your best. Fantastic.


    • maa gold member
      February 16, 2007
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      thank you so much for the bronze-trophy, tyler ...
      your generous gift is very much appreciated ...
      I hope you are well ...
      all the best,

      maa

  • MargaretG silver member
    February 15, 2007

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    While you may have been writing about your own experience, I felt an echo in mine. We hold so tight to people, places and things, that when they inevitably disappear, they leave an aching space in our hearts. It is one thing to know about impermanence, and another to live accordingly. There is hope in it too, all states change in time.
    Your line "Behind appearance I’d my fear disguise" is not quite so graceful as the majority. This time I like the first half better than the second, because it ends on a hopeful thought.
    Blessings


    • maa gold member
      February 15, 2007

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      thank you, dear margaret, for your precious comment and applause, as well as for your suggestions for improvement ... I really appreciate your assistance ...
      indeed, most of us live as if everything were permanent ... as if a state or situation would never end ... how could it be possible otherwise, that we spend so much time with worthless distraction, forgetting that our next breath might be our last ...
      the greatest art is, as you say, to integrate the lesson of impermanence into our daily lives, and to know how to discern the ephemeral from the eternal ... which will bring about the necessary detachment and result in peacefulness and serenity ...
      I also prefer the first part this time ...

  • maa gold member
    February 15, 2007
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    thank you for your poetic response, jonathan ...
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