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The glow of life...

They sparkled with joy when happy and glad
They were all wet when I felt down and sad
They were mirrors of myself to all who love
As they could see what was I like before I know
They were innocent when I was learning to crawl
And were all red in anger in teens we would brawl
But as in life they came to me like a boon
So now can I not see the Sun, the Moon
In love when I would let them  speak to her
She blushes more than my words can Oh! dear
They were the ones that showed me my dreams
My visions of brighter tomorrows to begin

To me they are as wonderful as they can be 
My lovely eyes that show the world to me 

 

 

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"Eyes are the glow of life"

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 15, 2007

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    wow, this is beautiful, it was a pleasure to read, i mean you kind of put my eyes in a new light to me, i like this, this is clever and creative, you dida fantastic job on this keep it flowing


  • MissStranger
    February 15, 2007

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    LOVELY

    despite some problems with the rhythm and the riming here and there,the message was lovely revealed yet a little bit too childish.you should pay more attention to the number of syllables in each line in order to make it all flow easily.you could have used a some intriguing methaphors to challange the reader a bit but all in one, the poem is beautiful!thank you for entering and good luck!